Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本切题，也提供了年龄和父亲买车这两个细节。但“in my childhood”不如“when I was a child”自然；“a bike with four wheels”应说明是“a bike with training wheels”；“a It's rare”表达不清，可能想说“it was unusual”或“it was special”。另外，重复使用“Umm”和“yeah”影响流利度，句子之间也缺少清晰的连接。建议用“because”或“so”连接原因和结果，并控制在3句话左右。

例: Yes, I did. When I was four, my father bought me a small bike with training wheels, so I could learn to ride safely. I remember it clearly because it was my first bike and I was very excited to use it.

提案: 回答直接表达了“很受欢迎”，但后半部分存在严重的搭配和语法问题。“It”应改为复数“Bikes are”；“with the development of technology”不能清楚解释自行车流行的原因；“bicycle sharing is a very top shoulder in our”表达不完整且不自然。建议明确提到共享单车、短途出行和环保等具体原因，并使用“Moreover”或“because”组织信息。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. In particular, bike-sharing services are common in big cities because they are convenient and affordable for short trips. Moreover, many people choose bicycles to avoid traffic and reduce pollution.

× When I was four years old, my father bought me a bike with four wheels and a It's rare, I remember it.

✓ When I was four years old, my father bought me a bike with four wheels. It was rare, I remember.

原句把多个意思不同的句子错误地连接在一起，而且“a It's rare”结构不完整。“a”后面不能直接接完整句子，因此应将内容拆成两个完整句子。

× Yes, absolutely. It's very popular in my country with the development of technology and bicycle sharing is a very top shoulder in our.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Bikes are very popular in my country. With the development of technology, bicycle sharing has become a popular choice in our country.

原句包含多个句子成分，但连接方式不正确；“a very top shoulder in our”也不是完整、正确的英语表达。“our”后面缺少名词，因此改为“our country”。同时将长句拆开，使每个句子结构完整、意思清楚。

× It's very popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country.

前文提到的是复数名词“bikes”，所以不能用单数代词“It”和单数动词“is”来指代。应使用复数主语“Bikes”和复数动词“are”。