Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant, and well developed. However, “when my father gifted it to me” is unnatural; say “when my father gave it to me as a gift.” Also, “constantly used it” sounds slightly excessive, and the final sentence would be more natural with a linking phrase such as “I mainly used it...” or “For example,...”.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me as a gift for my seventh birthday. I mainly used it to explore my neighbourhood, visit friends, and run small errands. It gave me a lot of freedom and independence.

提案: You answer the question directly, but the reason is repetitive and not fully natural. Avoid repeating “because” and “transport,” and replace “the advancements in the technology” with “technological advances” or explain how cars and public transport are more convenient. Add a specific comparison or example to make your answer more effective.

例: I don’t think bikes are particularly popular in my country. Most people prefer cars or public transport because they are more convenient for long journeys, especially in large cities with heavy traffic and hot weather. However, cycling is becoming more common among young people and fitness enthusiasts.

× I believe that bikes are less popular in my country, mostly because people prefer public transport and private transport because of the advancements in the technology.

✓ I believe that bikes are less popular in my country, mostly because people prefer public and private transport because of advancements in technology.

The noun technology is generally uncountable when referring to technology in a general sense, so it does not usually take the definite article the. Also, the article the is unnecessary before advancements when the speaker is referring to advancements in general. Use advancements in technology instead.