Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly using the past tense: “Yes, I had one.” Correct the verb forms, such as “had,” “gave it up,” “donated it,” and “became useful.” Improve clarity by explaining who received the bicycle and use linking words such as “because” and “so.” Also, avoid slightly unnatural expressions like “a family member who knew there”; say “a family member who lived nearby” instead. Your answer is within the recommended length, but it would be more effective with a clearer topic sentence and more precise details.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I gave it up when I was about 13 because my family moved frequently and we no longer had enough space to store it. We donated it to a family member who lived nearby, so I was happy that someone else could use it.

提案: Give a clear overall answer first, such as “Yes, bikes are fairly popular, especially in cities.” Then compare different areas logically. Correct the grammar in phrases such as “it depends on the area” and “other areas do not have many.” Avoid unfinished phrases, repetition, and unclear words. Support your opinion with specific reasons, such as bike-friendly roads, traffic congestion, or the lack of safe cycling lanes. Use linking words like “however” and “whereas” to make the comparison easy to follow.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, although it depends on the area. In large cities, many people cycle because there are bike-friendly roads and heavy traffic. However, bikes are less common in rural areas because there are fewer dedicated cycling lanes and public transport is often more convenient.

× Yes, indeed, I have one.

✓ Yes, indeed, I had one.

The question asks about a past situation when you were a child, so use the past tense had instead of the present tense have.

× I think I give it up when I was 13.

✓ I think I gave it up when I was 13.

The action happened in the past, so the past-tense form gave is needed. Also, give up is a phrasal verb, so it should be written as gave it up when referring to a specific past event.

× We donated to another family member who knew there.

✓ We donated it to another family member who knew about it.

The verb donated needs a pronoun to show what was donated. Use it after donated. The phrase knew there is unclear because know normally needs an object or a following clause, so knew about it is grammatically appropriate.

× It become useful.

✓ It became useful.

The sentence describes a past result, so use the past-tense form became instead of the base form become.

× It depends the area if you are living in.

✓ It depends on the area where you live.

The verb depend is followed by the preposition on. The phrase where you live is a more natural way to identify the area.

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✓ Well, it depends on the area where you live. In cities, there are usually bike-friendly paths or roads, but other areas do not really have many.

The original response contains incomplete and confused word groups, making the sentence difficult to understand. Divide the ideas into two complete sentences and use a clear subject, verb, and object in each sentence.

× In the city, bike-friendly paths or roads are available.

✓ In cities, there are usually bike-friendly paths or roads.

Use there are to introduce the existence of plural things such as paths or roads. The plural noun cities also makes the statement general and natural.

× In the city, there are usually bike-friendly paths or roads.

✓ In cities, there are usually bike-friendly paths or roads.

When speaking generally about urban areas, use the plural form cities rather than the singular phrase the city.

× Other areas do not really have much.

✓ Other areas do not really have many.

Use many with countable plural nouns. Since the omitted noun is understood to be bike paths or roads, many is correct. Much is used with uncountable nouns.