Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접 답하는 주제문을 먼저 제시하면 더 자연스럽습니다. ‘I’m not good at exercise’는 자전거를 타는 능력에 대한 의미로는 어색하므로 ‘I wasn’t very interested in cycling’처럼 표현하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한 ‘I didn’t experience riding a bike usually in my child’s life’는 부자연스러우므로 ‘I rarely rode it during my childhood’로 수정하세요. 과거 경험과 이유를 연결어 ‘although’나 ‘because’를 사용해 간결하게 연결하면 효과적입니다.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I learned how to ride it. However, I wasn’t very interested in cycling, so I rarely rode it during my childhood. I usually preferred playing indoors instead.

提案: ‘Fike’는 ‘Bike’의 오타 또는 발음 오류로 보이며, ‘one of the exercises’보다는 ‘a popular form of exercise’가 자연스럽습니다. ‘become’은 주어가 ‘bikes’이므로 ‘have become’ 또는 현재의 일반적 사실을 나타내는 ‘are’로 고쳐야 합니다. 자전거가 인기 있는 이유나 구체적인 사용 장소를 한 가지 덧붙이면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다. 예를 들어 건강, 교통 체증, 환경 보호 중 하나를 이유로 제시하고 ‘also’나 ‘because’를 사용해 연결하세요.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They are used both for exercise and transportation, especially in large cities. Many people ride them to stay healthy and avoid traffic jams.

× When I was young, I learned how to ride a bike, but I'm not good at exercise and I don't want to ride, so I didn't experience riding a bike usually in my child's life.

✓ When I was young, I learned how to ride a bike, but I'm not good at exercising and don't want to ride, so I didn't usually ride a bike during my childhood.

The preposition in my child's life is incorrect and unnatural when referring to the period when you were a child. Use during my childhood instead. Also, during is followed by a noun phrase that describes a period of time.

× When I was young, I learned how to ride a bike, but I'm not good at exercise and I don't want to ride, so I didn't experience riding a bike usually in my child's life.

✓ When I was young, I learned how to ride a bike, but I'm not good at exercising and don't want to ride, so I didn't usually ride a bike during my childhood.

After the expression be good at, use a noun or a gerund. Because you are describing the activity of doing exercise, exercising is more appropriate than exercise. Practice using the pattern be good at + noun or verb-ing.

× When I was young, I learned how to ride a bike, but I'm not good at exercise and I don't want to ride, so I didn't experience riding a bike usually in my child's life.

✓ When I was young, I learned how to ride a bike, but I'm not good at exercising and don't want to ride, so I didn't usually ride a bike during my childhood.

The adverb usually should normally be placed before the main verb in a negative past-tense sentence: didn't usually ride. Avoid placing usually after the object or at the end when it modifies the frequency of the action.

× Yes, Fike is one of the exercises and also become a transportation for people in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are a popular form of exercise and a common means of transportation in my country.

When speaking about bicycles in general, use the plural noun bikes rather than the singular form. The word Fike also appears to be a spelling error; the correct word is bike or bikes. Practice using plural nouns for general statements.

× Yes, Fike is one of the exercises and also become a transportation for people in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are a popular form of exercise and a common means of transportation in my country.

The verb become does not agree with the present-tense subject and is not correctly formed in the original sentence. Since you are describing a current situation, use the present-tense structure bikes are. Use are when the subject is plural.

× Yes, Fike is one of the exercises and also become a transportation for people in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are a popular form of exercise and a common means of transportation in my country.

Transportation is generally an uncountable noun, so a transportation is incorrect. Use transportation without an article, or use the countable expression a means of transportation. Also, the natural expression is a form of exercise rather than one of the exercises in this context.