Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in the past tense: use “I had,” not “I do have” or “I have.” Avoid the unclear phrase “mostly a mom will buy it for us”; say “my mother bought me one.” Also, “whenever I was a child” is incorrect here—use “when I was a child.” Give one specific supporting detail, such as where you rode the bike or how you learned.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me when I was about six because she wanted me to learn how to ride. I usually rode it around our neighborhood after school.

提案: State your opinion clearly and avoid repeating “it’s popular in my country.” Use the plural subject “bikes” with “they are.” Improve the comparison by saying “People usually ride bikes for short distances, whereas they take a car or motorcycle for longer journeys.” Use accurate and natural vocabulary, such as “motorcycle” instead of “motor,” and add a specific reason or example.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for short trips. Many people ride them to nearby shops or to work because they are cheap and convenient. However, people usually take a car or motorcycle when they need to travel a long distance.

× I do have a bike when I was a child because at that age mostly a mom will buy it for us to like learning to ride something.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child because, at that age, my mom would usually buy one for us to learn to ride.

The question asks about a past situation, so use the past form had instead of the present form do have. Would buy is also more appropriate than will buy because it describes a repeated action in the past.

× So I have a bike whenever I was a child.

✓ So, I had a bike when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to the past, so the verb have must be changed to its past form, had. Use when rather than whenever because you are referring to one period of your life, not repeated occasions.

× It's popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country.

The topic is bikes, which is plural. Therefore, use the plural noun bikes with the plural verb are instead of the singular form it is.

× People used to ride a bike if they don't like don't go anywhere far, but if they go anywhere far, they might go with it motor or car, but yeah, it's popular in my country.

✓ People usually ride bikes when they do not need to go far, but if they need to travel a long distance, they might use a motorcycle or a car. Bikes are popular in my country.

This sentence describes a general situation in the present, so use the present tense, usually ride, rather than the past form used to ride. The verbs do not need and need also make the conditions grammatically consistent.

× People used to ride a bike if they don't like don't go anywhere far, but if they go anywhere far, they might go with it motor or car, but yeah, it's popular in my country.

✓ People usually ride bikes when they do not need to go far, but if they need to travel a long distance, they might use a motorcycle or a car. Bikes are popular in my country.

The original sentence contains the unfinished and repeated structure do not like do not go. Use a complete condition, do not need to go far, and organize the two contrasting ideas into clear clauses.

× People used to ride a bike if they don't like don't go anywhere far, but if they go anywhere far, they might go with it motor or car, but yeah, it's popular in my country.

✓ People usually ride bikes when they do not need to go far, but if they need to travel a long distance, they might use a motorcycle or a car. Bikes are popular in my country.

For means of transportation, use by motorcycle or by car, or use a verb such as use followed by the vehicle. The expression go with it motor or car is not grammatically correct.

× People used to ride a bike if they don't like don't go anywhere far, but if they go anywhere far, they might go with it motor or car, but yeah, it's popular in my country.

✓ People usually ride bikes when they do not need to go far, but if they need to travel a long distance, they might use a motorcycle or a car. Bikes are popular in my country.

Singular countable vehicle nouns normally need a determiner. Use a motorcycle and a car. When speaking about bikes in general, use the plural form bikes without an article.