Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in the past tense: say that you did not have a bike. Avoid repetition such as “village village side,” and use natural phrases such as “there were no proper roads.” Remember subject–verb agreement: “my parents didn’t allow me,” not “my parents doesn’t allow.” Add one specific reason or result to make the answer more complete.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I grew up in a village where there were no proper roads, so my parents didn’t allow me to have one. They were worried that riding a bike would be unsafe.

提案: Give a clear answer about popularity rather than saying bikes are “important.” Replace unclear expressions such as “sub competitive world,” “travel or buy within a minute,” and “using in the home” with natural phrases like “busy modern world,” “travel short distances quickly,” and “a convenient form of transport.” Use linking words to explain why bikes are popular, and distinguish between bicycles and motorbikes if necessary.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in rural areas. They are affordable and convenient for travelling short distances, such as going to work or the local market. In addition, they are easier to use than cars on narrow village roads.

× No, I don't have a bike because I belong to a village and in the village village side there is no facility of Rd. so my parents doesn't allow to buy a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because I lived in a village, and there was no road facility there, so my parents didn't allow me to buy a bike.

The question is about the past, so use the past forms didn't have and lived instead of don't have and belong. Use past tense consistently when describing childhood experiences.

× No, I don't have a bike because I belong to a village and in the village village side there is no facility of Rd. so my parents doesn't allow to buy a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because I lived in a village, and there was no road facility there, so my parents didn't allow me to buy a bike.

Because the situation happened in the past, there is should be changed to there was. The singular noun facility agrees with was.

× No, I don't have a bike because I belong to a village and in the village village side there is no facility of Rd. so my parents doesn't allow to buy a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because I lived in a village, and there was no road facility there, so my parents didn't allow me to buy a bike.

Facility of Rd. is not a natural English expression. Use road facility or, more naturally, road facilities. Also, the phrase there is more natural than repeating village side.

× No, I don't have a bike because I belong to a village and in the village village side there is no facility of Rd. so my parents doesn't allow to buy a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because I lived in a village, and there was no road facility there, so my parents didn't allow me to buy a bike.

Parents is a plural subject, so it cannot be followed by doesn't. In the past tense, use didn't. Also, allow normally takes an object before the infinitive: allow me to buy.

× Yes, bikes are important in the countryside because in this sub competitive world everyone wants to travel or buy within a minute so this is the best ride for using in the home.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in the countryside because, in this competitive world, everyone wants to travel from place to place quickly, so bikes are one of the best ways to get around.

For using in the home is not a natural expression for describing transportation. Use to get around or for getting around. The phrase get around means travel from one place to another.

× Yes, bikes are important in the countryside because in this sub competitive world everyone wants to travel or buy within a minute so this is the best ride for using in the home.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in the countryside because, in this competitive world, everyone wants to travel from place to place quickly, so bikes are one of the best ways to get around.

The original sentence contains several ideas joined together without clear structure. Use a clear because clause followed by a so clause. Also, travel from place to place quickly is the appropriate grammatical expression; buy does not fit the intended meaning.