Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer first, then give one or two clear supporting reasons. Use correct grammar (past tense) and avoid repetition. Add a linking word and finish the thought. For example, say you were afraid and lacked instruction, and mention any consequence or how you felt about it briefly.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I was afraid of riding because I never learned how to balance, and my parents didn't teach me. As a result, I usually walked to friends' houses instead.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and a brief example. Use smoother linking words and correct collocations (e.g., 'ride a bicycle', 'commute by bike'). Complete your sentence so the idea is finished.

例: Yes, definitely. Bicycles are very popular because many workers and students commute by bike to save money and avoid traffic. For example, in my city it's common to see people cycling to school or market every morning.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I'm so scared to to use it because I don't really have an idea on how to use that bicycle and sometimes

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was too scared to use one; I didn't really know how to ride a bicycle.

The student mixes past and present tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. The main clause is past (I didn't have), so explanations should be past as well (was scared, didn't know). 'I'm so scared to to use it' should be 'I was too scared to use one' and remove the duplicated 'to'. 'I don't really have an idea on how to use that bicycle' should be 'I didn't really know how to ride a bicycle.' Use consistent past tense for events in childhood and prefer 'ride a bicycle' or 'ride one.' Also combine fragments into a complete sentence using a semicolon or conjunction to improve sentence structure.

× Bikes are very popular in our country because some workers or some students use it bicycle to go to their work or school so that they can

✓ Bikes are very popular in our country because some workers and students use them to get to work or school.

The sentence has pronoun and article errors: 'use it bicycle' is incorrect. Use the plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'bikes.' Also 'some workers or some students' is awkward; use 'workers and students.' 'to go to their work or school' is better as 'to get to work or school.' The original sentence is also incomplete; the corrected version ends the thought. Ensure subject and pronoun agree in number.