Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise, correct grammar, add a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to improve fluency (for example: "and", "so", "which"). Keep it within 2–4 short sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it outside with my father every weekend, and we often explored the neighborhood together. Those rides helped me feel more confident and independent.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example: "because", "however", "for example"). Correct informal phrases like "we are now in the future" to clearer expressions. Avoid vague claims and provide a brief comparison or example.

例: Not very popular. Because of rapid development and widespread car ownership in Qatar, most people prefer cars for convenience. For example, long distances and hot weather make cycling less practical for daily travel.

× Yes, when I was a child I had a bike that I used to play always outside with my father.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike that I always used to play with outside with my father.

The original sentence places the adverb 'always' in an awkward position and misorders the verb phrase. 'Used to' is followed by the base verb 'play', and the adverb should come before the verb phrase ('always used to play') or after the verb ('used to always play'). Also the preposition 'with' should follow the verb 'play' (play with someone), and the adverbial 'outside' is clearer after 'with my father' or at the end. Suggested placement improves natural word order and clarity.

× Not that popular because we are now in the future with technology most people in Qatar use cars more than bikes.

✓ Not that popular because with modern technology most people in Qatar use cars more than bikes.

The phrase 'we are now in the future' is ungrammatical and awkward for the intended meaning. It mixes tense and a metaphor; instead use 'with modern technology' to explain the cause. The sentence as corrected uses the present tense correctly to state a general truth about current habits. Also adding a comma after 'popular' or rephrasing to a full sentence improves clarity. For example: 'Bikes are not that popular because with modern technology most people in Qatar use cars more than bikes.'