Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, số ít/ số nhiều, từ loại) và phát triển câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên. Tránh lặp từ và nói quá nhiều thông tin không liên quan. Cụ thể: dùng thì quá khứ cho trải nghiệm trong quá khứ (I didn’t have), tránh nói “I am very poor” nếu không muốn nhạy cảm—có thể nói “my family couldn’t afford one.” Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu: chủ đề chính, lý do/miêu tả ngắn, kết luận/chi tiết bổ sung. Dùng liên từ đơn giản như “but” hoặc “however” để nối ý.

例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. However, when I was a teenager I managed to save money and bought a second-hand bicycle. It became my main way of getting to school and meeting friends.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, sửa ngữ pháp và dùng thông tin cụ thể, tránh tuyệt đối hóa (every single citizen). Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp như “popular,” “common,” “environmentally friendly,” và cung cấp ví dụ hoặc tỉ lệ ước đoán. Dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “for example” để bổ sung lý do/hệ quả.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work or to markets, especially in cities. They are also considered environmentally friendly compared with cars.

× No I don't. I am very poor so I didn't have a bike when I was when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't. I was very poor, so I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The student mixes present tense 'I don't' with past context. Use past tense 'I didn't' and 'I was' to describe a past situation. Also remove the repeated phrase 'when I was'. Suggestion: Maintain consistent past tense for events that happened in childhood and avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID:6

× However when I was a teenagers I have AI had a very beautiful life.

✓ However, when I was a teenager, I had a very beautiful life.

Errors: 'a teenagers' uses singular article with plural noun; correct form is 'a teenager'. 'I have AI had' is a jumble of tenses/typos; use simple past 'I had' to keep past narrative consistent. Suggestion: Use 'a teenager' for one person in past and keep past tense verbs. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Yes please are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

The student wrote 'Yes please are' which is incorrect word order and uses 'please' mistakenly. The subject 'bikes' with plural verb 'are' is correct. Keep present simple for general fact. Suggestion: Start with 'Yes,' then state the fact: 'bikes are very popular'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Every single citizen in my country has their own bike and bicycles are very environmental friendly.

✓ Every single citizen in my country has his or her own bike, and bicycles are very environmentally friendly.

Using 'their' with singular 'every single citizen' is informal; for formal correctness use 'his or her' or rephrase to plural. Also 'environmental friendly' should be the adverbial form 'environmentally friendly'. Suggestion: Use 'his or her' or change to 'most citizens have their own bikes' and use 'environmentally friendly'. Grammar problem type ID:12