Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (remove unnecessary words like “that” and fix tense/word choice). Avoid redundancy and keep to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a three-wheeler that my dad bought me as a present, so I wasn’t always comfortable riding it. However, I used it often in the park near our house, which helped me gain confidence on two wheels later on.

提案: Make your response grammatically correct and more specific. Begin with a direct answer, then give one or two concrete reasons with linking words (for example, “because” or “for instance”). Correct vocabulary errors (e.g., “ride a bike,” “prefer outdoor transport”) and avoid vague phrases.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially during the summer. For example, many people cycle to parks and markets because it’s an inexpensive and healthy way to travel, and it lets them enjoy the scenery.

× I'm not quite sure that if I really ride that bike because it was a three Wheeler bike.

✓ I'm not quite sure if I really rode that bike because it was a three-wheeler.

The sentence mixes present tense 'ride' with past-time context. The examiner asked about childhood, so verbs should be in the past. Change 'ride' to past tense 'rode'. Also remove redundant 'that' before 'if' and make 'three Wheeler' into the compound noun 'three-wheeler'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for memories (I rode, I had, it was).

× So yeah, my dad bought it for me as a present.

✓ So yeah, my dad bought it for me as a present.

No grammatical correction is necessary here; the sentence is correct. It uses the definite article 'my' correctly and fits the past context. No change required.

× I think yes bikes are popular in my country, especially in summer.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country, especially in summer.

The filler 'yes' is unnecessary and interrupts the sentence flow. Removing 'yes' gives a clearer statement. Also add a comma after 'I think' is optional; the correction simplifies structure. Suggestion: Say 'I think bikes are popular...' or 'Yes, bikes are popular...' not both together.

× People really love to ride bikes and not prefer. Outdoor transportation because I think it's really nice to write a bike and see your surroundings.

✓ People really love to ride bikes and often prefer them for outdoor transportation because I think it's really nice to ride a bike and see your surroundings.

Several issues: 'and not prefer. Outdoor transportation' is fragmented and incorrect. 'Not prefer' should be replaced with 'often prefer them for' to show preference for bikes as outdoor transport. 'Write a bike' is a spelling/word choice error; it should be 'ride a bike'. Ensure 'ride' (verb) is used and pronoun 'them' refers to 'bikes'. Suggestion: Keep clauses connected and use correct verbs: 'prefer them for outdoor transportation' and 'ride a bike'.