Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, avoid hesitations and small grammatical mistakes, and provide a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because," "so," "therefore"). Also correct tense and phrasing ("when my parents were on a business" → "when my parents were working away on business"). Limit answer to about 2–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child because my family was on a tight budget. Therefore I usually walked to school or took public transport when my parents were away on business.

提案: Clarify and correct contradictory or repetitive statements, use specific comparisons and linking words, and correct grammar/tenses. Avoid repeating the same phrase and be precise about reasons (e.g., motorbikes are faster and better for long distances). Provide one clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting reasons with an example.

例: Not really. Motorbikes are far more popular because they are faster and more practical for longer commutes. For example, many people commute 10–20 kilometers to work, so they prefer motorbikes for speed and convenience.

× Umm so I usually walk to school when my parents were on a business.

✓ Umm so I usually walked to school when my parents were on a business trip.

The sentence describes a past habit, so the verb should be in the past tense (walked) not present (walk). Also 'were on a business' is incomplete and unidiomatic; use 'on a business trip'. Use past tense consistently for past-time reference.

× This is because people in my country usually use the motorbike instead of bicycle.

✓ This is because people in my country usually use motorbikes instead of bicycles.

Countable nouns should be plural when speaking generally. Use 'motorbikes' and 'bicycles' rather than singular forms. Also omit 'the' before general plural nouns.

× This is mostly because riding a bike is much more convenient and faster than riding a bike, so they usually use the motorbikes when they had to commute long distance.

✓ This is mostly because riding a motorbike is much more convenient and faster than riding a bicycle, so they usually use motorbikes when they have to commute long distances.

The original repeats 'riding a bike' causing a logical error; replace the first with 'riding a motorbike' and the second with 'bicycle' to show contrast. Maintain present tense for general truth: 'have to' not 'had to'. Use plural 'motorbikes' and 'long distances' for natural expression.