Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and completeness. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, give a reason with correct grammar, and add one brief supporting detail. Use linking words if adding more information. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my mum thought it was unsafe. For example, she worried about traffic near our home, so she preferred I walk or use public transport. As a result, I learned to be independent on foot rather than by cycling.

提案: Clarify the idea and use correct vocabulary and grammar. Give a clear topic sentence, then add a specific supporting detail or comparison using linking words (e.g., however, but, although). Avoid unclear metaphors like “the car is the father.”

例: Yes, bicycles are still quite popular, especially in cities for short trips and exercise. However, car ownership has grown a lot recently, so many families now prefer cars for convenience and comfort.

× No, I don't have because my mum doesn't want me to why

✓ No, I didn't because my mum didn't want me to.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so past tense should be used. 'I don't have' is present tense and incorrect here; use 'I didn't' (did not have). Also, the clause 'my mum doesn't want me to why' mixes present tense and adds an unnecessary 'why'. Use past tense consistently: 'my mum didn't want me to.' Use 'didn't' + base verb 'have' for past negation and 'didn't want' for past negative. Remove 'why' or place it appropriately as a separate follow-up question.

× Yes, it's quite popular and now the car is the father.

✓ Yes, they're quite popular, but nowadays cars are more common.

The question asks about bikes in general, so use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are' for 'bikes'. 'It's quite popular' incorrectly uses singular; use 'They're quite popular' or 'Bikes are quite popular.' The phrase 'the car is the father' is incorrect English and likely a mistaken metaphor. Replace with a clear comparison: 'cars are more common' or 'cars are more popular now.' Also adjust contrast with a conjunction 'but' or 'however' to show change over time.