Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (past tense and word order), make a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences). For example, use past simple consistently: "I had a bike when I was a child." Then explain who gave it and what you did with it: "My dad bought it for me, and I often rode it to visit friends or explore my neighborhood."

例: I had a bike when I was a child. My dad bought it for me, and it was one of my favourite toys. Because I enjoyed riding, I often went out with my friends to the park or around the neighbourhood. Riding helped me feel independent and made my childhood more active.

提案: Clarify ideas, fix grammar and vocabulary, and use linking words to structure the answer. Start with a direct statement, then give specific examples and a reason. Replace unclear words (e.g., "Elsbike") with correct terms like "electric bikes" or "e-bikes."

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, I see many young people and older people riding regular bikes and electric bikes in cities. Moreover, bikes are convenient for short trips, so many people use them to commute to nearby shops or work. Because cycling is cheap and often faster in traffic, it remains a common choice.

× Yeah, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence uses present tense 'have' but the time frame 'when I was a child' is past. Use past simple 'had' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: Use past tense for actions or states that occurred in the past (I had, I saw, I lived).

× My dad was bought it for me and bike is one of them one of my favorite things when I was a child I can back to go out with

✓ My dad bought it for me, and the bike was one of my favorite things when I was a child because I could go out with it.

Multiple errors: 'was bought' is incorrect passive plus extra 'was'; the correct active past 'bought' should be used. Missing article before 'bike' — use 'the bike'. 'One of them one of my favorite things' is redundant; 'one of my favorite things' is correct. 'I can back to go out with' mixes tenses and phrases; use past ability 'could' and 'go out with it'. Suggestion: Use simple past for completed actions (bought), include articles ('the bike'), avoid redundancy, and use 'could' for past ability.

× Yeah, I think so because Because I met many people especially young people and older people Elsbike when I'm going else when I'm going out and it's a convenience vehicle to go somewhere near

✓ Yeah, I think so because I see many people, especially young and older people, using e-bikes when I'm going out, and they're a convenient way to travel short distances.

Errors: 'met' (past) should be present 'see' to match general observation 'I think so'. Capitalization and repeated 'Because Because' removed. 'Elsbike' likely 'e-bike' and needs verb 'using'. 'When I'm going else when I'm going out' is jumbled; simplify to 'when I'm going out'. 'It's a convenience vehicle to go somewhere near' is awkward; 'they're a convenient way to travel short distances' is clearer and matches plural subject 'people' so plural pronoun 'they're' is used. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual observations (I see, people use), correct compound nouns ('e-bike'), and ensure pronoun number agreement.