Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense and word order: use past simple for past possession and say who gave it. Avoid filler words like “uh.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, when I was about ten, my father gifted me a small bicycle, so I learned to ride it in the park near our house.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and correct references. Use linking words (because, for example, moreover). Avoid unclear pronouns like “his” without a clear referent. Provide concrete examples of why bikes are popular (cost, convenience, culture, government policies).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people cycle to work in cities where there are dedicated bike lanes, and cycling events promoted by local celebrities have increased interest.

× Uh, no, I don't have either.

✓ Uh, no, I didn't either.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use past tense. 'Don't' is present-tense; 'didn't' is the correct past-tense negative auxiliary. Use 'either' after the negative auxiliary: 'didn't either.'

× Uh, I have a bicycle under my father gifted me in.

✓ Uh, I had a bicycle that my father gifted me.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and inappropriate preposition 'under' and 'in.' The speaker should use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Use a relative clause 'that my father gifted me' or 'my father gave me' to show the gift. Remove 'under' and 'in.'

× In my country bikes are really popular because of his, uh, showman and his style.

✓ In my country bikes are really popular because of him, uh, the showman, and his style.

The phrase 'because of his, uh, showman' uses the possessive 'his' incorrectly before the noun 'showman.' Use the object pronoun 'him' with 'because of' or rephrase to 'because of the showman and his style.' Also keep present tense 'are' since this is a general statement. The corrected version clarifies the referent and fixes pronoun use.