Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I had a bike as a child.") then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition, filler words (like "like", "you know"), and unclear phrases ("white person" is ambiguous here). Use simple linking words (e.g., "but", "because", "so") to show reasons. Keep it to 2–4 sentences and use correct tense (past).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I rarely rode it because I preferred skateboarding and spent most of my free time on a skateboard. As a result, my bike stayed unused at home.

提案: Answer directly and give clear, specific reasons with a logical link. Use fewer fillers and organize your points: state your opinion, then give 1–2 concrete reasons or examples. Use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "commute", "save money", "short trips") and complete your sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They are a convenient and inexpensive way to commute short distances, and many people use them to visit friends or run errands. Also, riding a bike helps people save money on public transport and avoid traffic.

× Yes, I have a bike, but I'm not getting used to.

✓ Yes, I had a bike, but I wasn't used to it.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so past tense should be used. 'Have' is present; change to 'had'. 'I'm not getting used to' is present progressive and incorrect here; the correct expression is 'wasn't used to' or 'didn't get used to'. Also replace vague 'to' with 'it' to refer to the bike. Suggestion: Use past simple or past habitual for childhood situations, e.g., 'I had a bike, but I wasn't used to it.'

× I was not getting used to riding on a bike 'cause like most of the most of the time I was using the the skateboard or something like, you know, 'cause like when I was a child, I was kind of a white person, you know, while the child.

✓ I didn't get used to riding a bike because most of the time I used a skateboard. When I was a child, I tended to follow what my friends did.

Multiple issues: use simple past for habitual past actions ('used' not 'was using' for repeated actions). 'Riding on a bike' should be 'riding a bike'. Remove filler words ('like', 'you know') and repeated words. 'I was kind of a white person' is unclear and likely incorrect; replaced with clearer idea 'tended to follow what my friends did'. Suggestion: Use simple past for habitual actions and keep sentences concise and clear.

× So I didn't want to, I didn't want to use that things that my friend using, you know.

✓ So I didn't want to use the things my friends were using.

Pronoun and noun agreement: 'that things' should be 'the things' or 'those things'. 'My friend using' lacks auxiliary and plural agreement; correct is 'my friends were using' or 'my friend was using'. Also remove duplicate 'I didn't want to'. Suggestion: Ensure determiners match nouns ('those things' or 'the things') and use correct verb forms for reported actions (past continuous for actions in progress: 'were using').

× Yeah, I think so because like the bicycle is so useful and helpful to move to move to the like another city or to go to the like for example friends house or something like that maybe you know if we are going to if we are going to take the train or some like transportation, we at least we have to pay something.

✓ Yes, I think so because bicycles are useful for traveling to another city or, for example, to a friend's house. If we take the train or other transport, we usually have to pay.

Use plural 'bicycles' to speak generally. Remove repeated phrases ('move to move to', 'the like'). Use 'a friend's house' for possession. For general truths, use present simple ('are useful', 'we usually have to pay'), not 'we are going to take'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general statements and present simple for habitual or general facts; avoid repetition and filler words.

× But if we have a bike, we don't need to pay like two

✓ But if we have a bike, we don't need to pay for transport.

Sentence ends abruptly and uses 'like two' incorrectly. Replace with a clear clause explaining what you don't need to pay for ('for transport' or 'for the fare'). Suggestion: Finish conditional sentences with a complete contrasting clause; avoid leaving phrases incomplete or using vague fillers like 'like two'.