Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with accuracy, word choice and coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct minor grammar, and avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “reading back”). Use linking words to add one or two specific details (where you rode it, who taught you). Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Yes — I had a bike from the age of seven. It was a small pink bicycle that my parents bought me for my birthday, and I learned to ride it in the park near our house. Because I could travel short distances on my own, it made me feel independent and very proud. I also remember riding with friends on weekends, which was a lot of fun.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (plural/singular agreement) and add a brief comparison or consequence. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., ‘common’, ‘preferred’, ‘convenient’, ‘infrastructure’).

例: Not really — bikes are not very popular in my country. People generally prefer cars because they are more convenient for long distances and the public transport system is limited, so cars feel safer and faster. As a result, cycling is mainly seen in parks or among enthusiasts rather than as an everyday mode of transport.

× It was pink color.

✓ It was pink.

The phrase 'pink color' is redundant; use the adjective 'pink' to describe the noun. Say 'It was pink' or 'It was the color pink.' Improve by using adjective + noun correctly, e.g., 'It was pink.'

× I love reading back because it made me feel independent and happy at the same time.

✓ I loved riding it because it made me feel independent and happy at the same time.

Two issues: wrong verb and tense consistency. 'Love' is present tense but the context is past (when you were a child), so use past 'loved.' Also 'reading back' is incorrect; likely intended 'riding it.' Ensure verb matches meaning and tense consistency: 'I loved riding it because it made me feel...'. Replace 'reading back' with 'riding it.'

× No, I don't think it's popular here because people prefer to use cars more than bike.

✓ No, I don't think they're popular here because people prefer to use cars more than bikes.

Pronoun and number agreement: 'it' refers to 'bikes' (plural) so use 'they're.' Also 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match 'cars' and the comparative meaning. Use consistent plural forms: 'they're popular' and 'bikes.'