Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and grammatically correct but very short and lacks naturalness and supporting detail. To improve, give a brief reason or a short elaboration (1–2 sentences) using linking words (for example, because or so) while keeping the total response under five sentences. Use a slightly more natural phrasing like “No, I didn’t” instead of the full form.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family lived in a small apartment and there wasn’t much space to store one. However, I sometimes borrowed bikes from neighbors to ride in the park on weekends.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors, awkward phrasing and redundancy. Improve clarity by using a clear topic sentence, correct article and word choice (e.g., “Yes, they are very popular”), and provide one specific reason with a linking word (because or since). Avoid repeating the same idea and keep sentences concise. Also use relevant vocabulary (affordable, convenient, short-distance travel).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to run errands in busy city areas where driving is difficult.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence is already correct for a past simple negative about a past state. No change needed.

× Yet yes, it is really popular in my country as it's a cheapest one of the cheapest transportation So, people love to move if they have to travel within the city, they like to travel

✓ Yes, bicycles are really popular in my country because they are one of the cheapest forms of transportation, so people like to use them when they need to travel within the city.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement ('it is' should be 'bicycles are' to match plural subject), article and adjective use ('a cheapest one of the cheapest' is incorrect; use 'one of the cheapest'), word choice and repetition ('transportation' needs 'forms of transportation' and 'move' is awkward; use 'use them' or 'travel by bike'), and punctuation/run-on sentence (sentence fragments joined incorrectly). Suggestions: 1) Use a plural subject with matching verb: 'bicycles are'. 2) Use 'one of the cheapest forms of transportation' for correct article and comparative structure. 3) Replace 'move' with 'use them' or 'travel by bike'. 4) Split into two clauses connected with a comma and coordinating conjunction or separate sentences to avoid a run-on: '..., so people like to use them when they need to travel within the city.'