Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, pronunciation, and clarity. Use correct verb forms and singular/plural nouns (e.g., 'bike', 'school'), and produce a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and keep the answer within 2–4 sentences. For example, say: “Yes, I had a bike when I was in primary school. I used it every day to cycle to school because it was faster than walking, and it gave me some exercise.” Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and remove filler words.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in primary school. I used it every day to cycle to school because it was faster than walking and helped me get exercise.

提案: Work on pronunciation, word choice, and sentence completeness. Replace mispronounced words ('bars' → 'bikes') and avoid fillers (’hmm’, ’mmm’). Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words such as 'because' or 'for example'. Keep sentences short and grammatical. For instance: “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children, because many families find them affordable and cities have many safe parks for cycling.”

例: Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially among children, because they are affordable and there are many parks and quiet streets where kids can ride safely.

× Yes, I did have a buy when I were in primary schools because I needed to ride a bike to go to schools every day.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was in primary school because I needed to ride a bike to go to school every day.

Plural and word choice errors: 'buy' is a misspelling of 'bike' (wrong word). 'Primary schools' should be singular 'primary school' when referring to the stage in general; 'schools' in 'go to schools' should be singular 'school' when referring to the place one attends. Also 'I were' is incorrect subject-verb agreement (see another entry). Suggestion: use 'bike', use singular 'primary school' and 'school' when speaking generally about your own schooling.

× Yes, I did have a buy when I were in primary schools because I needed to ride a bike to go to schools every day.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was in primary school because I needed to ride a bike to go to school every day.

Tense and subject-verb agreement error: 'I were' is incorrect; the correct past tense form for the first person singular is 'I was'. Suggestion: use 'I was' for past descriptions of your own situation.

× Hmm I think bars are popular in my country for children because. MMM, children's usually ride a bike.

✓ Hmm, I think bikes are popular in my country for children because children usually ride a bike.

Pronoun and word errors: 'bars' is a wrong word; likely intended 'bikes'. 'children's' is a possessive form but the sentence needs the plural noun 'children' as the subject. Remove the unnecessary apostrophe. Also remove the fragment 'because.' and attach the reason. Suggestion: use 'bikes' and 'children' (no apostrophe) and link the clauses correctly.

× Hmm I think bars are popular in my country for children because. MMM, children's usually ride a bike.

✓ Hmm, I think bikes are popular in my country for children because children usually ride a bike.

Sentence fragmentation and ordering: The fragment 'because.' leaves the reason incomplete and interrupts flow. Also the filler 'MMM,' can be omitted or replaced with a pause; combine clauses into one coherent sentence. Suggestion: remove the fragment and write a complete sentence giving the reason immediately.