Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ понятен, но требует улучшения в естественности и грамматике. Уберите лишние слова («like a many children») и используйте простое, прямое вступление. Также избегайте повторов (не говорить «bike» слишком часто) и постройте предложение с поддерживающей деталью, используя связку (например, because, so). Примерные шаги: 1) Начните с ясного тематического предложения. 2) Добавьте одну-две конкретные детали (цвет, кто подарил, почему нравилась). 3) Используйте связующее слово для связности.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a bright red bicycle that my father bought me, and I loved riding it to the park because it was fast and easy to ride.

提案: Ответ недостаточно ясен и содержит фрагменты и повторы («in my country» несколько раз) и незаконченные мысли. Нужно дать прямой ответ, затем подкрепить конкретными причинами или примером, используя связующие слова (for example, because, therefore). Убедитесь, что каждая мысль завершена и избегайте тавтологии. Шаги: 1) Сформулируйте краткий ответ (Yes/No + степень). 2) Приведите 1–2 конкретные причины или пример. 3) Используйте связки для связности.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, commuters often ride bikes to work to avoid traffic, and families enjoy cycling in parks at weekends.

× Actually, like a many children, I had a bike.

✓ Actually, like many children, I had a bike.

The phrase 'a many children' is incorrect because 'many' is used with plural nouns without an article. Use 'many children' or 'a lot of children'. Remove the article 'a'. Suggestion: say 'like many children' or 'like a lot of children'. Grammar problem type id: 1

× In my opinion, bikes are popular in my country because in my country many people try to live with.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are popular in my country because many people try to live sustainably/without cars.

The clause 'try to live with' is incomplete and unclear; it lacks an object. This is a sentence structure error. Provide a clear object or phrase (for example 'live without cars' or 'live sustainably') to complete the idea. Also avoid repeating 'in my country' in the same sentence. Grammar problem type id: 26

× Activities and in my country.

✓ Many people use bikes for daily activities in my country.

This fragment 'Activities and in my country.' is not a complete sentence and lacks a verb and clear subject — a sentence structure error. Combine it with the previous sentence or rewrite it as a full sentence such as 'Many people use bikes for daily activities in my country.' Grammar problem type id: 26