Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The student did not answer the question. Be direct: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add 1–2 specific supporting details (e.g., how often you rode, with whom, a memorable event). Keep responses natural, concise (max 5 sentences), and use linking words when adding details (for example, 'sometimes', 'because', 'so').

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day after school to visit my friends and go to the nearby park. Because we lived close to the seaside, I often enjoyed cycling along the promenade with my brother, which was a memorable part of my childhood.

提案: Good direct answer with clear supporting details and an example. To improve further, add one more specific detail or a brief comparison (use linking words like 'also' or 'however') to make your answer richer and more coherent. Avoid repeating simple ideas; use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., 'commonly used', 'commuting', 'affordable').

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country, especially in urban areas. They are affordable and convenient for short trips, so many people use them for commuting. For example, I often take a shared bicycle from the subway station to my office, and sometimes I cycle on weekends for exercise and to avoid traffic.

× I live in a small city near the sea.

✓ I lived in a small city near the sea.

The examiner asked about the student's childhood (past), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'lived' instead of 'live' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when referring to past situations or experiences (e.g., 'I lived', 'I had').

× I enjoy reading books and walking in the park with my friends.

✓ I enjoyed reading books and walking in the park with my friends.

The context of the question is childhood, so actions should be described in the past. Change 'enjoy' to 'enjoyed' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: When discussing habits or activities in the past, use past simple (e.g., 'I enjoyed').

× Learning English helps me meet new people and understand different cultures.

✓ Learning English helped me meet new people and understand different cultures.

Because the student is describing their childhood, the present-tense verb 'helps' should be changed to the past tense 'helped' to maintain consistent past narration. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent with the time being described; use past tense for past experiences.

× Yes, bicycles are popular in my country, especially in cities.

✓ Yes, bicycles were popular in my country, especially in cities.

If the student is continuing to speak about the past (childhood context), 'are' should be changed to 'were' to match past narration. If the student intends to speak about the present general situation, then 'are' would be correct; here we align with the childhood context. Suggestion: Decide whether you refer to the past or present and keep verbs consistent accordingly.

× For example, I often use a shared bicycle to travel from the subway station to my office.

✓ For example, I often used a shared bicycle to travel from the subway station to my office.

To be consistent with past tense narration about childhood, 'use' should be changed to 'used'. This is primarily a tense issue, but also note that 'a shared bicycle' is acceptable. Ensure tense consistency across the response. Suggestion: Match verb tenses across related sentences; use past simple for actions in the past (e.g., 'I used').