Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Also correct grammar (e.g., "I often fell off because I lacked practice") and emotional words (use "fell off" not "fell down" for bikes).

例: Yes — I did. My bike was a small pink bicycle with big wheels and a bell, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood. However, I often fell off because I didn’t have much practice, so my parents helped me learn gradually until I became more confident.

提案: Give a direct opinion, then support it with specific reasons or examples and use linking words. Fix grammatical errors and remove redundant phrases (e.g., "due to the to its high usage" is incorrect). Try: state opinion, then explain why with 1–2 reasons or an example.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and daily commutes. For example, students and office workers often cycle to save money and avoid traffic, and some cities have good cycling lanes which encourage people to ride.

× But I have really.

✓ But I really did.

The student intended to refer to a past action ('I had fun') so the correct past auxiliary is 'did' not the present perfect 'have'. The original sentence 'But I have really.' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use 'But I really did.' to confirm the previous past statement. Suggestion: when emphasizing a past action, use past simple auxiliary 'did' or complete present perfect with an object (e.g. 'But I have, really, enjoyed it').

× Yes, actually I believe that bikes are quite popular in my country due to the to its high usage.

✓ Yes, actually I believe that bikes are quite popular in my country due to their high usage.

The phrase contained an extra 'the' and incorrect pronoun 'its' for the plural noun 'bikes'. Use the plural possessive pronoun 'their' to agree with 'bikes', and remove the redundant 'the'. Also 'due to' correctly links cause to noun phrase 'their high usage'. Suggestion: match pronouns to the noun number and avoid repeated articles.