Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer repeats the examiner's question instead of responding. Give a direct, concise answer (topic sentence) and add one or two specific supporting details. Keep responses natural, grammatical, and under five sentences. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” when adding details.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it to ride to school and to visit friends in my neighborhood, which helped me become more independent. For example, I rode about 3 kilometers every day during primary school, and I enjoyed racing with my classmates on weekends.

提案: Your response answers the question but has grammatical errors, unclear phrases, and some hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar (e.g., “Bikes are very popular”), and provide two specific supporting reasons linked with words like “because” and “for example.” Avoid filler words and unfinished phrases. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. Many people choose cycling to avoid traffic and to stay fit. For example, my colleagues often cycle to work on weekdays, and local parks have many riders on weekends.

× Is bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country.

The original sentence has an extra auxiliary 'Is' causing a subject-verb agreement and sentence structure error. Remove the incorrect 'Is' so the plural subject 'Bikes' pairs with the plural verb 'are'. Suggestion: start simple with 'Bikes are...' and avoid adding an extra verb at the beginning.

× The main reason is that is in the modern site, people are very, uh, busy, so they tend to cycling, which combines both enjoyment and physical exercise.

✓ The main reason is that in modern times people are very busy, so they tend to cycle, which combines both enjoyment and physical exercise.

Multiple issues: an extra 'is' after 'that' creates an incorrect clause; 'site' is the wrong word here—'times' is correct; 'tend to cycling' is incorrect verb pattern (after 'tend to' use base form). Corrections: remove the extra 'is', replace 'site' with 'times', and change 'tend to cycling' to 'tend to cycle'. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× For example, save all my colleagues that want to uh, walk you by.

✓ For example, several of my colleagues prefer to cycle rather than walk.

The original is unclear and ungrammatical: 'save all' seems intended as 'several of'; 'that want to uh, walk you by' is nonsensical. Replace with a clear comparative idea: 'several of my colleagues prefer to cycle rather than walk.' This fixes incorrect word choice and sentence structure and uses correct verb forms and prepositions.