Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear with tense and grammar, give a direct topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 5 sentences). For example, use past tense for childhood and name where you rode, who with, and what you enjoyed. Avoid repetitive phrasing and unclear place names.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it with my childhood friends in my hometown, a small place called Sip, and we often cycled to the local park to play games. Because it was close to my house, I rode almost every afternoon and it was my main way to explore the neighbourhood.

提案: Avoid one-word answers. Give a concise opinion (topic sentence) and support it with specific reasons or examples, using a linking word to connect ideas. This shows fluency and coherence and provides content for the examiner to follow up on.

例: Not really; I think bikes are not very popular in my country because many people prefer motorbikes and cars for daily transport. Furthermore, the city infrastructure is not very cycle-friendly, so few people feel safe riding on the roads.

× I do bike and I play along with my friends, childhood friends in my home town the Sip.

✓ I used to ride a bike and played with my childhood friends in my hometown, Sip.

The original sentence has multiple issues: incorrect verb usage 'do bike' (unnatural and incorrect form) and awkward phrasing 'play along with my friends, childhood friends in my home town the Sip.' This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use 'used to' to describe habitual actions in the past and 'ride a bike' as the correct collocation. Also reorder and simplify the clause: 'played with my childhood friends' and use 'hometown, Sip' with a comma. Suggestion: for past habitual activities, use 'used to' or simple past ('I rode a bike and played...') and use natural verb collocations like 'ride a bike'.