Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with verb tense and article use, and make your answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, use past simple (I had) and avoid repeating the same phrase. Also give a brief specific memory to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue bicycle with a bell, and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon. Because my parents lived nearby, I spent hours practicing tricks with my friends, which helped me become more confident on the road.

提案: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so, when). Avoid vague phrases like “like emotion” and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., affordable, common, practical).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For instance, many students and workers ride bicycles to save money and avoid traffic. As a result, cycling is a common part of daily life in both cities and small towns.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child, then I enjoy with my bike and spend a lot of time with my bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; I enjoyed riding it and spent a lot of time with it.

Errors: incorrect tense consistency and verb choices. 'Have' should be past 'had' to match 'was'; missing article 'a' before 'child'; 'enjoy with' is incorrect — use 'enjoyed riding' or 'enjoyed it'; 'spend' should be past 'spent' to maintain past-tense narrative; repetitive 'with my bike' can be shortened to 'with it'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when talking about childhood and use correct verb + object collocations (enjoy riding, spend time with it).

× Yes, every people like bike in my country it is popular and it is like emotion for people in my country and when there aren't a lot of money they buy a bike

✓ Yes, everyone likes bicycles in my country; they are popular and people feel emotionally attached to them, and when they do not have much money they buy a bicycle.

Errors: 'every people' is incorrect — use 'everyone' or 'every person'; subject-verb agreement: 'people like' needs 'people like' but after changing to 'everyone' use 'likes'; 'bike' should be plural 'bicycles' or 'a bicycle' depending on context; 'it is like emotion for people' is ungrammatical — use 'people feel emotionally attached to them'; 'there aren't a lot of money' is wrong: use 'they do not have much money' or 'there isn't much money' depending on meaning. Suggestion: choose correct quantifier/pronoun (everyone/people), ensure noun number (singular/plural), fix verb agreement, and use clearer phrasing for emotional attachment and lack of money.