Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article use (e.g., “when I was younger”, “a bike”). Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was younger because my parents bought one for me to ride around our neighborhood. For example, I used to practice balancing on the pavement every afternoon until I felt confident riding on the road.

提案: Give a direct, coherent opinion first, then support it with a clear reason and a short example. Use correct plural and vocabulary (e.g., “bikes”, “children”, “smartphones”). Use linking words such as “however” or “but” to contrast. Keep sentences concise and avoid filler phrases like “I was like.”

例: Yes, bikes are still quite popular, especially among children, because they are inexpensive and good for exercise. However, many teenagers prefer smartphones and scooters nowadays, so overall bike use is decreasing among older children.

× Yes, when I was a younger my dad and mother gave me bike to play on the ground.

✓ Yes, when I was younger my dad and mother gave me a bike to play with on the ground.

'a younger' is incorrect adjective use; use 'younger' without article. Missing article before 'bike' requires 'a bike' (article error — treated here as adjective/article misuse). Also 'gave me bike to play on the ground' is unnatural: use 'gave me a bike to play with on the ground' to show purpose and correct verb/preposition collocation. Suggestion: Use 'when I was younger' and include the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable nouns, and use 'play with' for playing with a toy.

× Yes, I think bike is actually all the kids have one and I was like thinking that the generation now is using chipity or phones but in the back all the all the father and

✓ Yes, I think bikes are actually common; all the kids have one, and I thought that the current generation uses tablets or phones, but behind that many fathers still...

Multiple issues: 'bike is' should be plural 'bikes are' to match 'all the kids' (singular/plural agreement). 'I was like thinking' is informal and awkward; 'I thought' fits better. 'the generation now is using chipity or phones' contains an unknown word 'chipity'—likely 'tablets'—and tense should be simple present 'uses'. Also sentence is incomplete; I adjusted ending to be grammatically coherent. Suggestion: Use plural for general statements about items, choose standard vocabulary (tablets), use appropriate tense and avoid filler phrases like 'was like'.