Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief statement), then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds and repetition. For example, mention who bought the bike, how old you were, and one memory or reason you liked it.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bicycle when I was seven, and I used to ride it every afternoon in the park. Because the park was near our house, I learned to balance quickly and I have fond memories of racing my friends there.

提案: Answer directly and support with clear reasons and a comparison. Use linking words (because, so, however) and specific details (e.g., common transport, reasons like speed or convenience). Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words. Correct basic grammar: subject-verb agreement and word order.

例: Not really. In Vietnam most people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting. As a result, bicycles are less common for daily travel and are mainly used for recreation or exercise.

× Oh yes, definitely I have to buy it when I, uh, during and, uh, I think the, the, every, every children's in the world have the, you know, have been the, uh, hotter one, uh, want bicycles in the, the childhood. So, so I.

✓ Oh yes, definitely. I had to buy one when I was a child, and I think almost every child in the world wants a bicycle during their childhood.

This sentence has a confusing and disordered structure with multiple tense and agreement issues (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). The speaker mixes present and past tenses and uses incorrect plural/singular forms ('children's' instead of 'child' or 'children'). The phrase 'have been the hotter one' is ungrammatical and unnecessary. Suggested improvements: use a clear past-tense clause 'I had to buy one when I was a child' for a past habit, use 'almost every child' for correct noun form and quantification, and 'wants a bicycle' to match singular 'every child' with third-person singular verb form.

× Oh yes, definitely I have to buy it when I, uh, during and, uh, I think the, the, every, every children's in the world have the, you know, have been the, uh, hotter one, uh, want bicycles in the, the childhood. So, so I.

✓ Oh yes, definitely. I had to buy one when I was a child, and I think almost every child in the world wants a bicycle during their childhood.

The original uses 'children's' incorrectly (possessive) and 'every, every children's' which is incorrect for quantification (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Use 'every child' (singular) and match it with 'wants' (third-person singular). Also 'bicycles' should be singular with 'every child' or use 'children' with 'want'.

× Oh yes, definitely I have to buy it when I, uh, during and, uh, I think the, the, every, every children's in the world have the, you know, have been the, uh, hotter one, uh, want bicycles in the, the childhood. So, so I.

✓ Oh yes, definitely. I had to buy one when I was a child, and I think almost every child in the world wants a bicycle during their childhood.

The phrase 'I have to buy it when I... during' mixes present obligation ('have to') with a past time reference. For past habits, use the past tense 'had to' and 'was a child' (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). Suggestion: use consistent past tense when talking about childhood.

× I think the, the, every, every children's in the world ... want bicycles in the, the childhood.

✓ I think almost every child in the world wants a bicycle during their childhood.

Using 'every' requires a singular noun ('every child') and a third-person singular verb 'wants' (Grammar Problem Type ID 2). The original uses 'children's' and 'want' which do not match 'every'.

× Uh, no, of the items by naughty either the, the popular in my countries, you know, because, uh, everyone's in Vietnamese, Uh, in Vietnam, you're the motorcy motorbike to school you everyday because it's very convenient and and it's faster than the you, you, you just bicycle.

✓ No, bikes are not very popular in my country because in Vietnam people usually ride motorbikes to school every day; motorbikes are more convenient and faster than bicycles.

This reply is highly garbled and contains multiple sentence structure errors (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Phrases like 'of the items by naughty either' and 'everyone's in Vietnamese' are unclear. The correction clarifies the intended meaning: using present simple for general facts ('are not very popular', 'people usually ride'), correct noun forms ('motorbikes'), and adverb placement ('every day'). Remove filler sounds and repeat words to make the sentence coherent.

× Uh, no, of the items by naughty either the, the popular in my countries, you know, because, uh, everyone's in Vietnamese, Uh, in Vietnam, you're the motorcy motorbike to school you everyday because it's very convenient and and it's faster than the you, you, you just bicycle.

✓ No, bikes are not very popular in my country because in Vietnam people usually ride motorbikes to school every day; motorbikes are more convenient and faster than bicycles.

The original misuses pronouns and second-person 'you' where general third-person 'people' is required (Grammar Problem Type ID 12). Use 'people' or 'everyone' to talk about general habits, and 'they' or passive structures as needed. Also fix 'my countries' to 'my country'.