Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. For example, explain why you didn’t have a bike and describe your feelings or what you did instead. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'but' or 'so'.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I wanted one badly and was obsessed with cycling, but my family couldn’t afford it, so I often borrowed a neighbor’s bike to ride around the park.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific, coherent reasons. Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'bikes' not 'bites'; explain the problem clearly). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and be specific about how bikes help.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Bangladesh because traffic congestion makes cars slow and expensive. For example, many people use motorcycles and bicycles to commute to work or school quickly and affordably.

× No actually, but I actually not really but I was obsessed with bike or cycle but as I couldn't write that thing so.

✓ No, actually I didn't really have one, but I was obsessed with bikes or cycles; I just couldn't afford one.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and pronoun use. 'I actually not really' is ungrammatical; use past tense auxiliary 'didn't' for negation. 'Obessed with bike or cycle' needs plural 'bikes or cycles' and 'couldn't write that thing' is incorrect choice of verb; context suggests 'afford' or 'buy'. Also add commas and a semicolon to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use past simple negative 'didn't have' and choose the correct verb 'afford'.

× Yeah, actually bites are much more popular in my country as my country is Bangladesh and it has a crucial problem that is staff exam and bike helps anyone to get time on time, get any.

✓ Yes, actually bikes are much more popular in my country, Bangladesh, because of a major problem with traffic congestion, and bikes help people get to places on time.

Errors include misspelling 'bites' instead of 'bikes' and awkward sentence structure. 'It has a crucial problem that is staff exam' is unclear; likely intended 'traffic congestion' or 'traffic jams'. 'Bike helps anyone to get time on time, get any' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'bikes help people get to places on time.' Ensure subject-verb agreement 'bikes are' and use clearer vocabulary. Suggestion: use plural nouns and clear cause ('because of traffic congestion') and concise result clause.