Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha açık, doğru zamanlarla ve mantıklı bir sıra ile verilmelidir. Şu eksikliklere dikkat etmelisiniz: 1) Zaman uyumu yanlış (geçmişten bahsederken geçmiş zaman kullanın). 2) Cümle yapısı karışık ve tekrarlar var; tek bir kısa ana cümleyle başlayıp 1-2 destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin. 3) Bağlaçları doğru kullanarak akıcılığı artırın (e.g. "because", "and", "so"). 4) Spesifik detay verin: kaç yaşında, kimden aldınız, neden sevdiğiniz gibi bilgiler ekleyin. Örnek yapı: konu cümlesi (geçmiş zaman) + neden/ayrıntı + kısa sonuç veya duygu ifadeleri.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink and I loved it because my parents gave it to me for my eighth birthday. I used to ride it to the park with my friends every weekend, so it was very special to me.

提案: Cevabınız net bir görüş içermeli ve bunu destekleyen spesifik sebepler verilmelidir. Şu noktalara dikkat edin: 1) Doğru ve doğrudan bir görüş beyan edin (Yes/No + neden). 2) Nedensellik için net sebepler sıralayın (örneğin altyapı, ekonomik durum, hava şartları). 3) Bağlaçlar kullanarak mantıklı akış sağlayın (e.g. "because", "however", "for example"). 4) Gerektiğinde kısa karşılaştırma veya istatistik benzeri bir örnek verin. Cümle sayısını 3-4 ile sınırlayın.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars for convenience and longer distances. There are also few bike lanes in many cities, which makes cycling less safe. For example, I rarely see adults commuting by bike to work, although children sometimes ride for fun.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about having a bike 'when you were a child', which is a past time reference. The student used present tense 'have' instead of past tense 'had'. Use past tense to match the time frame: 'I had a bike.' Suggestion: Pay attention to time expressions (e.g., 'when I was a child') and use past tense verbs accordingly.

× This bike is pink and that times my favourite color is pink every child's girl childs and this is very big things for me because I very once that bike

✓ The bike was pink; pink was my favourite color as a child, and it meant a lot to me because I really wanted that bike.

The original sentence has multiple issues: tense inconsistency, incorrect possessive/ noun forms, pluralization, and unclear phrasing. Specific problems include incorrect tense ('is' instead of 'was' for past), wrong plural forms ('child's girl childs' is ungrammatical), and awkward expression ('very big things for me', 'I very once that bike'). Corrections: use past tense 'was', express 'as a child' for time, use singular 'child' not 'childs', and replace vague phrases with clear verbs ('meant a lot to me', 'I really wanted that bike'). Suggestion: Break complex ideas into shorter sentences, keep tense consistent, and use simple vocabulary (want -> wanted, mean a lot -> meant a lot).

× This is probably no because my country has so many bike for way for bike my country's people so many use cars everywhere and maybe you just ride bike beatsides but

✓ Probably not, because in my country there are many cars and people mostly use cars; some people ride bikes occasionally.

The response mismatches grammar and structure for the question about general popularity. Problems include incorrect negation ('This is probably no'), wrong noun forms ('so many bike' should be 'many bikes' or 'many cars' depending on intended meaning), omission of 'there are' to state existence, and poor sentence flow. Use 'Probably not' for negation, use 'in my country there are' for existence (there be issue), and plural nouns correctly. Also prefer present simple for general facts ('people mostly use cars'). Suggestion: Use clear negation words ('probably not'), proper 'there are' for existence, correct plural forms, and simple present tense for general statements.