Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep your answer directly on topic and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike when I was young.”). Then add one or two concise supporting details that are coherent and specific, using linking words (e.g., “however,” “because,” “so”). Avoid unclear phrases and unnecessary repetition. Also correct grammar: use past tense for childhood (didn't/did) and clear subject references (my father).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, my father taught me to ride using his old bicycle when I was about eight, so I learned to cycle on quiet roads near our house. I enjoyed riding with friends on weekends.

提案: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific, well-organized reasons. Use linking words (for example, “because,” “for instance,” “also”) and avoid repetition. Use complete sentences and more precise vocabulary (e.g., “common,” “convenient,” “narrow streets,” “affordable”). Keep it to three sentences maximum.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many people use bicycles to travel through narrow streets and busy markets where cars cannot go. In addition, children often learn to ride early, which keeps cycling common among all ages.

× No, I don't have any bicycle in my childhood, but because the time my father wasn't allowed to ride on a bike but aligned, I learned to cycle and my childhood.

✓ No, I didn't have a bicycle in my childhood, but at that time my father was not allowed to ride a bike. I learned to cycle during my childhood.

Errors: incorrect tense (used present 'don't have' instead of past 'didn't have') and wrong noun phrase 'any bicycle' (use 'a bicycle'). 'in my childhood' is acceptable but 'during my childhood' is more natural; 'because the time' is incorrect — use 'at that time'. 'wasn't allowed to ride on a bike but aligned' is unclear and grammatically wrong; I changed it to 'was not allowed to ride a bike' and split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use past tense for past situations (didn't have, was not allowed, learned) and simplify unclear clauses. Use 'a bicycle' for countable singular nouns and 'during' or 'in' consistently for periods.'

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country. Why because every child every child and every adult used to ride on a bike and also bike they can ride easily and they can go in any area because it is in a small street also that can go easily

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country because every child and every adult used to ride a bike. Bikes are easy to ride and they can be used to go to many areas, even on small streets.

Errors: repetition ('every child every child'), wrong noun form 'bike' used inconsistently (use 'bikes' or 'bicycles'), awkward clause 'Why because' — combine into one reason clause. 'used to ride on a bike' — use 'ride a bike' (no 'on'). 'they can go in any area' has incorrect subject reference; use 'they can be used to go to many areas' or 'people can go to many areas by bike'. 'because it is in a small street also that can go easily' is ungrammatical; rephrased to 'even on small streets.' Subject-verb agreement: keep plural 'bikes' with plural verbs. Suggestions: avoid repetition, keep consistent noun forms, use 'ride a bike', and make sure subjects match verbs; break long run-on sentences into shorter ones.'