Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting details (appearance, who gave it, age, habit, and reason). To improve, correct small grammatical errors, use smoother linking words, and keep sentences concise (max 5). For example, say “My parents gave it to me” and connect the habit and reason with a linking phrase such as “so” or “which made me feel”. Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., “felt free” or “sense of freedom”).

例: I did. I had a small red bicycle that my parents gave me for my seventh birthday. I used to ride it to the park every weekend, which made me feel a great sense of freedom.

提案: The response is off-topic and unclear. For Part 1 you should directly answer the examiner’s question with a topic sentence and then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Practice answering about popularity with reasons and examples (e.g., transport, exercise, environment). Avoid asking questions back to the examiner unless asked to clarify. Keep it concise and natural.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them for short trips because they are cheap and help avoid traffic, and cycling is also a common way to keep fit, especially in cities with bike lanes.

× My parents gave me for my seventh birthday and I used to ride it to the park every weekend because I love the feeling of freedom

✓ My parents gave it to me for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend because I loved the feeling of freedom.

This sentence has a missing object after 'gave' and a tense inconsistency. According to the Grammar Problem Type List, this is a sentence structure error (26). The verb 'gave' needs a direct object ('it') and the indirect object order should be 'gave it to me'. Also, the speaker is describing past habitual actions, so the clause 'because I love the feeling of freedom' should use past tense 'loved' to match the past context. Suggestion: include the object ('it') after 'gave', use 'gave it to me', add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and', and maintain consistent past tense for reasons relating to past habits.

× But you tell me what does make the frontman?

✓ But tell me, what makes the frontman?

This sentence has incorrect word order for a question embedded in a clause and an unnecessary auxiliary verb, which is a sentence structure error (26). In embedded or indirect questions with 'tell me', the correct word order is subject + verb ('what makes the frontman'), not the inverted auxiliary form ('does make the'). Also 'But' at the start can be followed by a comma. Suggestion: use 'tell me' followed by the normal statement word order for the embedded question and remove the unnecessary 'does'.