Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer, grammatically correct and more fluent. Start with a direct topic sentence, provide one or two specific supporting details, use linking words (e.g., "and", "because", "so") and avoid repetition. Also correct tense and vocabulary: say "I had" (past tense), describe the bike (size, colour, why it was special), and give a brief memory or reason why it mattered.

例: Yes, I had a small, red bike when I was a child. It was a second-hand bike that I loved because it had a bell and training wheels, so I felt confident riding it around my neighborhood. I remember practicing every afternoon until I could ride without the training wheels.

提案: Make your response direct and use clearer vocabulary and structure. Begin with a topic sentence stating whether bikes are popular, then give specific reasons and examples using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "however"). Replace vague phrases like "not so far direction" with "short trips" or "commuting short distances". Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in Thailand, especially for short trips and commuting in small towns. For example, many people use bikes to go to nearby markets or to travel short distances to work because they are inexpensive and convenient.

× Yeah, it is.

✓ Yeah, it was.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Using 'is' (present tense) is incorrect. Change to 'was' to match the past-time reference.

× It is like a rare small bike I I have felt a lot in in the past.

✓ It was a small, somewhat rare bike that I fell off a lot when I was a child.

Multiple issues: tense conflict (use past 'was' not 'is'), repetition ('I I' and duplicated 'in'), incorrect verb choice 'have felt' (should be 'fell off' for falling from a bike), and unclear noun phrase ordering. Also add a relative clause 'that I fell off a lot' and 'when I was a child' to clarify timing. Use commas to separate adjectives 'small, somewhat rare.'

× I think it is very normal for Thai people to buy a bicycle in like not so far direction or not so far destination.

✓ I think it is very normal for Thai people to buy a bicycle to travel to nearby places.

Use of 'is' is acceptable for a general present opinion, but the original phrase 'in like not so far direction or not so far destination' is ungrammatical and awkward. Replace with 'to travel to nearby places' which uses correct preposition 'to' and a natural noun phrase. Also remove filler 'like' for clarity.