Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify tense and meaning, use a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, and add one specific supporting detail. Use past tense for childhood and avoid filler sounds. For example, start: “Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child.” Then give a short detail such as how you used it or who gave it to you.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I used it every day to ride to my friend’s house and to the park, which helped me learn road safety and balance.

提案: Give a direct opinion and support it with a brief, specific reason. Avoid unrelated words and hesitations. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to make your idea coherent. Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in India because many people use them for daily commuting and they are affordable. For example, students and delivery workers often travel by motorcycle or bicycle to save time and money.

× Yes, I do buy when, uh, when we're a child.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'do buy' and incorrect contraction 'we're' instead of first person singular past 'I was'. The question asked about the past ('Did you have'), so use past tense 'had'. Also 'buy' is unnecessary. Suggestion: answer directly in past tense with subject matching: 'I had one when I was a child.'

× I think among India and in popular by umm or one side iPhone. No I have no idea.

✓ I think bicycles are popular in India, but I'm not sure.

The original is fragmented and contains incorrect prepositions and unclear phrases. Use a clear subject and verb: 'bicycles are popular in India'. 'Among India' and 'in popular by' are incorrect prepositional uses. 'No I have no idea' contradicts the earlier claim; if unsure, use 'but I'm not sure.' Suggestion: form a complete sentence with correct prepositions and a clear stance: 'I think bicycles are popular in India, but I'm not sure.'