Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify meaning and use correct verbs and vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then give one or two specific supporting details (age, who gave it to you, memorable rides). Keep it natural and limit to 3–4 short sentences. Use linking words like "when" or "because" correctly.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I received it as a birthday present when I was eight, and I often rode it to the park with my friends. Riding made me feel happier because it was a fun way to play and explore.

提案: Be direct and organize your answer: state your opinion, then give specific reasons and a brief comparison. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid filler words like "umm". Use linking words such as "however", "because" or "although" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many people prefer scooters for daily commuting because they are faster, but bicycles are common in smaller towns and among students because they are cheap and healthy. Therefore, I would say bikes are still popular in certain groups.

× Yes, when I was sad I used to write a cycle.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to ride a bicycle.

The student used incorrect vocabulary and verb: 'write a cycle' is incorrect. The intended meaning is past habitual action of using a bike, so use 'used to ride' and the noun 'bicycle' (or 'bike'). Also 'when I was sad' doesn't match the examiner's time frame 'when you were a child'; it should be 'when I was a child' to answer the question appropriately. Suggestion: replace 'write a cycle' with 'ride a bicycle' and ensure the time phrase matches the question.

× You're in my country, most people have umm scooters but I seem bike also are there so I think it's popular in my country.

✓ In my country, most people have scooters, but bicycles are also common, so I think they're popular.

Multiple issues: wrong opening phrase 'You're in my country' is inappropriate; use 'In my country'. 'Most people have umm scooters' needs a comma and article removal is fine. 'I seem bike also are there' is ungrammatical—word order and verbs are wrong. Use 'bicycles are also common' or 'there are also bikes' to express existence. Finally, 'so I think it's popular in my country' has unclear reference; use plural 'they're' or repeat 'bicycles' to match plurality. Suggestions: start with 'In my country', use 'scooters' and 'bicycles' correctly, use 'are' with plural subject, and keep clear subject references.