Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid redundant words and limit length to 1–3 sentences. Add a brief specific detail (e.g. age, type of bike) and a linking phrase if you expand.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bicycle when I was about four years old, and I learned to ride it in the park near our house.

提案: Make your answer more natural and complete: give a direct opinion, use correct vocabulary and grammar, and add one or two specific supporting reasons with linking words. Correct phrases (e.g. "fast-paced", "public transport"), avoid repetition, and finish the sentence.

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in Hong Kong. Because it is a fast-paced city with limited space, most people use the MTR or buses for commuting, so cycling is less common for daily travel.

× Of course yes, my mom and dad bought me a bike when I am a child in around 4 years ago.

✓ Of course, my mom and dad bought me a bike when I was a child, around 4 years ago.

The sentence mixes present tense 'am a child' with past time reference 'bought' and '4 years ago'. Use past tense 'was' to match 'bought' and the time expression. Remove redundant 'yes' after 'Of course' and reposition 'around 4 years ago' for natural word order. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for events that happened in the past and place time expressions at the end or after the clause. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× To be honest, I don't think Bikes are popular in my country because my country Hong Kong is a fast pastered country.

✓ To be honest, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because Hong Kong is a fast-paced country.

'Bikes' should be lowercase 'bikes' (common noun) and the adjective 'fast pastered' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'fast-paced'. Also omit the repeated 'my country' before 'Hong Kong' for clarity. Use consistent present simple 'don't think' as given. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and avoid redundant phrases. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× People always go go to work or go to school by MTL or public transportation.

✓ People usually go to work or to school by MTR or other public transportation.

There is a duplicated word 'go go' and the transit abbreviation likely intended is 'MTR' (Mass Transit Railway) not 'MTL'. 'Always' is acceptable but 'usually' is more natural here. Also 'by public transportation' is better phrased 'by public transportation' or 'using public transportation'; include 'to' before 'school' to match 'go to'. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, use the correct abbreviation, and choose the adverb that matches the general frequency intended. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× They always use their

✓ They usually use them/their bikes/few people use bikes.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'their'. It is unclear whether 'their' refers to bikes, cars, or something else. Provide the appropriate noun (for example, 'bikes' if intended) or rephrase the idea: 'Few people use bikes.' Suggestion: always complete possessive phrases with the noun ('their bikes') or reword the sentence to be complete. Grammar problem type ID: 26