Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense usage (past) and reduce repetition. Focus on vivid, concrete details (where you rode, how often, who with) and avoid redundant phrases.

例: Yes. I had a small red bike when I was a child, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood. For example, I often rode to the park and along the river every weekend, and sometimes my friends and I would race each other. Riding to the corner shop to buy ice cream was my favourite treat because it felt like a little adventure.

提案: Make a clear, direct opening sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar (subject-verb order, plurality) and use linking words like 'because', 'for example', or 'also' to connect ideas. Be precise about how people use bikes (commuting, recreation, sport) and avoid vague phrases like 'different other kind of places.'

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because people use them for both commuting and recreation. For example, many commuters cycle to work in cities, while others ride in the countryside to visit parks or tackle hill trails. Also, bike tours and cycling events are common, which shows how widespread cycling culture is.

× When I was a child I had a bike and I really like it.

✓ When I was a child I had a bike and I really liked it.

The sentence mixes past context ('When I was a child I had a bike') with present tense 'I really like it'. Use past tense 'liked' to maintain consistent past narration. Suggestion: Keep tenses consistent; use past when talking about past experiences.

× I was used to go around my city with it and explore new places.

✓ I used to go around my city with it and explore new places.

The construction 'was used to go' is incorrect. 'Used to' + base verb expresses habitual past actions. 'Be used to' + -ing means accustomed to something. Here the intended meaning is habitual past, so use 'I used to go'. Suggestion: Use 'used to' + base verb for past habits; use 'be used to' + -ing to express being accustomed.

× Usually I went I usually go to buy my ice cream and it was really a nice thing to do.

✓ Usually I went to buy my ice cream, and it was really a nice thing to do.

The original repeats 'usually' and mixes present 'I usually go' with past 'I went' and 'it was'. The context is past, so keep past tense: 'Usually I went to buy my ice cream.' Remove duplicate phrase and ensure punctuation. Suggestion: Avoid repeating time adverbs and keep tense consistent with the time frame.

× I think are really popular bikes in my country because we have different kind of landscapes and they usually go around with bikes to explore parks, hills, ski or different other kind of places.

✓ I think bikes are really popular in my country because we have different kinds of landscapes and people usually ride bikes to explore parks, hills, ski resorts, and other places.

Word order 'I think are really popular bikes' is incorrect; subject should precede verb. Also 'different kind' needs plural 'kinds'; 'they usually go around with bikes' is awkward—use 'people ride bikes'. 'Ski' should be 'ski resorts' or 'skiing areas'. Suggestion: Place the subject before the verb, use plural forms for 'kinds', use 'ride bikes' for natural phrasing, and use appropriate nouns like 'ski resorts'.

× So yeah, I think it's very popular.

✓ So yeah, I think they are very popular.

Pronoun reference: 'it' refers to singular but refers to 'bikes', which is plural. Use 'they are' to agree with plural noun. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with the nouns they replace.