Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cümlenizde zaman uyumsuzluğu, dilbilgisi hataları ve telaffuz/kelime seçimi sorunları var. Önce net bir konu cümlesi kurun (örn. "Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child.") ve ardından 1-2 destekleyici detay ekleyin. Bağlaçlar (and, so, because) kullanarak cümleleri bağlayın ve fazla uzun cümlelerden kaçının. Ayrıca 'chilled' kelimesi yanlış; burada 'child' kullanılmalı. Örnek akış: konu cümlesi + aktivite + duygu/anlam. Tek cümlede 5'ten fazla cümle kurmayın ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I rode it with my friends almost every afternoon, and we often explored nearby parks because it was a fun way to spend time together.

提案: Cümlenizde İngilizce olumsuzlama ve kelime sıralaması hataları var (ör. 'are doesn't popular' yanlış). Önce net bir görüş cümlesi verin (ör. "No, I don't think bikes are very popular.") sonra sebepleri somut örneklerle destekleyin: ulaşım tercihleri, altyapı veya şehir farkları. Bağlaçlarla (because, however, although) mantığı güçlendirin ve tekrarları azaltın. İfade uzunluğunu 2-3 cümleyle sınırlayın.

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars or buses for commuting. However, in some cities with better bike lanes, more people use bicycles for short trips.

× Yes, I have a bicycle when I were chilled and we cycle with my friends all the time.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child and we cycled with my friends all the time.

The sentence uses the wrong tense and incorrect words: 'have' should be simple past 'had' because the question asks about the past; 'were chilled' is incorrect — likely meant 'was a child'; 'cycle' should be past 'cycled' to match past-time reference. Also 'chilled' is a wrong word form. Suggestion: Use past simple for past situations (had, was, cycled).

× I think bikes are doesn't popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes aren't popular in my country.

The sentence mixes plural 'bikes are' with the singular negative contraction 'doesn't', causing subject-verb disagreement. For plural subjects use 'do not'/'don't' or 'are not'/'aren't' depending on the adjective. With adjective 'popular' the correct verb is a form of 'be': 'bikes aren't popular'. Suggestion: Use 'aren't' with plural noun + adjective.

× In my country people use car or bus and like this they don't use bikes but some cities they use but not so popular.

✓ In my country, people use cars or buses and therefore don't use bikes much, although in some cities people do use them, but they are not very popular.

Multiple issues: 'use car or bus' needs plural 'cars or buses' (singular/plural error) and missing articles; 'and like this' is awkward conjunction — replace with 'and therefore' or 'so'; 'some cities they use' is incorrect word order and missing subject-verb agreement; 'but not so popular' lacks subject and verb. Suggestion: Break into clearer clauses, use plural nouns with 's', use appropriate connectors ('therefore', 'although'), and include subjects and verbs for each clause.