Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and natural but too short. Add one or two supporting details (e.g., who gave it to you, how often you rode it, or a brief memory) using a linking phrase to expand coherently. Keep it to a maximum of 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, of course. My parents bought me a small red bike when I was seven, and I used to ride it to visit friends every weekend. I remember practicing until I could ride without training wheels, which made me feel very independent.

提案: The answer is unclear and contains mistakes (word choice and repetition). Start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give specific supporting details with linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Use correct vocabulary ("bike" not "bite") and avoid repeating the same phrase.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, when I was a child many families owned at least one bike, and children often rode to school or to the park after classes.

× As I remember when I was a child, everyone got the bite. Every month everyone got the bite.

✓ As I remember from my childhood, everyone got a bike. Every month, everyone got a bike.

The original sentence uses the incorrect word 'bite' instead of 'bike', which makes the meaning unclear; this is a lexical choice error and affects sentence structure (ID 26). Also the phrasing 'As I remember when I was a child' is awkward; 'As I remember from my childhood' is more natural and fits the past context. Add a comma after 'Every month' for clarity. Suggestion: replace incorrect word, streamline the time phrase, and add necessary punctuation.