Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (past tense agreement and subject-verb concord), use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a specific supporting detail. Keep answers concise (max 4–5 short sentences) and use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "so", "and").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my friends in the neighborhood because it was fun and gave us freedom to explore nearby parks. For example, we would race to the big oak tree every afternoon, which helped me become more confident and active.

提案: Correct singular/plural and article use ("bikes are"), simplify and clarify meaning (explain what "perpetuge" or "MTL" refers to), and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use clear vocabulary and accurate sentence structure.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because public transport is cheap and convenient. For example, buses and the metro go directly to most neighborhoods, so many people prefer them over cycling for daily commutes.

× I had a bike when I were a child because I usually play with my other friends for example the young and it is very enjoyable it was very enjoyable for me to play with them because they share their ability with us at the same time.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child because I usually played with my friends; for example, the younger ones. It was very enjoyable for me to play with them because they shared their skills with us.

Errors: 'friends' is correct plural but 'other friends' is awkward and unnecessary; 'the young' is incorrect plural noun usage; verb tenses are inconsistent (present 'play' and past 'had') so plural timing must match. Suggestions: Use 'was' not 'were' for singular past (see ID 2 as well), use past tense 'played' to match 'had', replace 'the young' with 'the younger ones' or 'younger children', and use 'shared their skills' rather than 'share their ability' for natural plural noun usage and past tense consistency.

× I had a bike when I were a child because I usually play with my other friends for example the young and it is very enjoyable it was very enjoyable for me to play with them because they share their ability with us at the same time.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child because I usually played with my friends; for example, the younger ones. It was very enjoyable for me to play with them because they shared their skills with us.

Error: 'I were' is incorrect; the correct past form for first person singular is 'I was'. Suggestion: Use 'I was a child' (past simple) to agree with 'had'.

× I had a bike when I were a child because I usually play with my other friends for example the young and it is very enjoyable it was very enjoyable for me to play with them because they share their ability with us at the same time.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child because I usually played with my friends; for example, the younger ones. It was very enjoyable for me to play with them because they shared their skills with us.

Error: Mixed present ('usually play', 'is very enjoyable', 'share') with past context. Suggestion: Keep past tense throughout when describing past habits: 'usually played', 'was very enjoyable', 'shared'.

× I had a bike when I were a child because I usually play with my other friends for example the young and it is very enjoyable it was very enjoyable for me to play with them because they share their ability with us at the same time.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child because I usually played with my friends; for example, the younger ones. It was very enjoyable for me to play with them because they shared their skills with us.

Error: 'the young' is not a correct adjective-noun phrase here; 'young' needs a noun like 'children' or the comparative 'younger ones'. Also 'ability' is singular and vague; 'skills' is a more appropriate plural noun. Suggestion: Use 'younger ones' or 'younger children' and 'skills'.

× I had a bike when I were a child because I usually play with my other friends for example the young and it is very enjoyable it was very enjoyable for me to play with them because they share their ability with us at the same time.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child because I usually played with my friends; for example, the younger ones. It was very enjoyable for me to play with them because they shared their skills with us.

Error: 'share' should be past tense 'shared' to match past narrative, not past participle specifically but consistent past tense is required. Suggestion: Use simple past 'shared'.

× I don't think bike is popular in our country in my country because the perpetuge of my city is very convenient and very cheap for us to use.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because public transport in my city is very convenient and cheap to use.

Errors: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally; 'in our country in my country' is repetitive; 'perpetuge' is likely 'public transport' (word choice) and is uncountable. Suggestion: Use plural for general statements ('bikes are'), remove repetition, and use 'public transport' or 'public transportation'.

× For example, the bus is can go to the menu location directly and the MTL is also as well.

✓ For example, the buses can go directly to many locations and the metro is the same.

Errors: 'is can go' is incorrect verb construction; use 'can go' without 'is'. 'to the menu location' is incorrect—likely 'many locations'. 'MTL' unclear; interpreted as 'metro' or 'MTR'; 'also as well' is redundant. Suggestion: Use 'buses can go directly to many locations' and 'the metro is the same'.

× For example, the bus is can go to the menu location directly and the MTL is also as well.

✓ For example, the buses can go directly to many locations and the metro does too.

Error: 'is can go' mixes 'is' with modal 'can'; for third-person singular you use 'can go' or 'does too' for agreement. Suggestion: Remove 'is' before 'can' and use plural 'buses' to generalize.