Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более естественно и грамотно: начните с чётного главного предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 поддерживающие детали. Исправьте порядок слов и грамматику (артикли, времена). Используйте связку для плавного перехода: например, "and" или "so". Постарайтесь не превышать 3–4 предложений.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me as a birthday present, and I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighbourhood with my friends.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит грамматические ошибки; нужен чёткий тематический тезис и конкретные причины или примеры. Начните с прямого "Yes/No" или "I think...", затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных причины, используя связки (because, for example, so). Избегайте повторений и бессмысленных слов.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use them for short trips and commuting because they are cheap and convenient, and there are several bike lanes in major cities.

× Yes when a child I had a bike my parents bought each for me as a birthday present and I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighborhood with my friends.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike; my parents each bought one for me as a birthday present, and I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighborhood with my friends.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing auxiliary 'was' for past state, and awkward phrasing 'bought each for me'. Use 'when I was a child' for correct time clause order; use 'my parents each bought one for me' to show each parent bought a bike (or 'my parents bought one for me' if they bought a single bike). Add commas and conjunctions to separate clauses for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because anyone because to write a country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because many people ride bikes across the country.

The original sentence contains incorrect words ('anyone because to write a country') that make it unintelligible. Replace with 'many people ride bikes across the country' to express popularity and correct verb use 'ride' for bicycles. Ensure subject 'many people' matches plural verb and the clause clearly states the reason. Grammar problem type ID:26