Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中保持句子简洁并直接答题，避免重复和语法错误；说明原因时用清晰的时态与逻辑连接词，并补充具体细节（例如大概年龄或是否用其他交通方式）。练习点：1) 用一个清楚的主题句直接回答；2) 用一到两个支持句说明原因并给出具体细节；3) 避免结巴，使用连接词如“because”或“so”使句子连贯。

例: No, I didn't. My parents divorced when I was young, so I lived with my grandparents and we couldn't afford a bike. Instead, I usually walked to school or took the bus.

提案: 回答要更完整并使用连贯的句子：先直接回答，然后用具体原因和例子支持观点。注意重复和语法，使用合适的词汇（例如 "hilly" 或 "mountainous"），并可比较城市与乡村或不同城市的差异。

例: Not really. My city is quite mountainous, so cycling is difficult and less common. In flatter coastal cities, however, many people use bikes for short trips or commuting.

× No, I didn't because when I was a child, my parents have, uh, had divorced and so I, I lived with my grandparents and uh, they, and they haven't, they hadn't, haven't, uh, have enough, uh, they have not enough money to, to.

✓ No, I didn't, because when I was a child my parents had divorced, so I lived with my grandparents and they didn't have enough money.

原句主要问题是时态混用和表达不完整。这里描述的是过去发生的事情，应该用过去完成时表示在过去某一时间之前已经发生的动作（my parents had divorced），后续结果继续用一般过去时（I lived）。此外，否定句“they didn't have enough money”应使用一般过去时的否定形式而不是现在完成或现在时的混乱表达。建议：描述过去的先后关系时用过去完成时表示更早发生的动作，其余动作用一般过去时；避免重复和口头语。

× No, because our city my city is like mountain city there are there are many mountains in our city

✓ No, because my city is a mountainous city; there are many mountains in my city.

原句结构混乱，有重复和缺少冠词/形容词形式的问题。'mountain city' 更自然的表达是 'a mountainous city' 或 'a city in the mountains'。句子中 'our city my city' 是重复，应选择 'my city'。建议：避免重复，使用合适的形容词（mountainous）或介词短语（in the mountains），并用分号或连词分开两部分，使句子更清晰。