Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct tense and article use; avoid filler words like 'Umm'; provide a clear topic sentence then 1–2 specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar: use past tense consistently and correct articles (e.g., 'a present from my grandmother').

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was six. It was a birthday present from my grandmother, and I loved riding it around the local lakes because it was peaceful and helped me stay active.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, use correct grammar and plural/singular forms, and add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Replace vague words and correct sentence structure (e.g., 'I think bikes are popular').

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient and inexpensive. For example, many people use them for short commutes and leisure rides, and they are also a healthy way to get regular exercise.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was 6.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was six.

Write numbers under ten in words in formal writing/spoken tests: 'six' instead of '6'. This is a style recommendation rather than a grammar rule, but it improves formality and correctness in exam contexts.

× Umm it is my present from grandmother for my birthdays.

✓ Umm it was a present from my grandmother for my birthday.

Use the definite article 'my' before 'grandmother' to show possession, change 'is' to 'was' to match past context, use singular 'birthday' because a single event (the gift) is usually described as for 'my birthday'. Also change word order to the natural English phrasing 'a present from my grandmother'.

× Umm I really love it and I usually ride around the lakes.

✓ I really loved it and I usually rode around the lake.

The student is describing a past possession, so verbs should be in past tense: 'loved' and 'rode'. 'Lakes' likely refers to one nearby body of water; if it is plural, keep plural but maintain past tense. Also 'usually' with past references takes past tense.

× Yes, I think by a populars because it's so convenient, cheap and a good way to exercise.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular because they are convenient, cheap, and a good way to exercise.

The original has several errors: 'by a populars' is ungrammatical. Use plural subject 'bikes' with 'are popular'. Replace contraction 'it's' (singular) with 'they are' to agree with plural 'bikes'. Maintain parallel adjectives and include commas. 'A good way to exercise' remains singular but follows plural subject via 'are'.