Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tense and avoid slang. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (because, so, therefore). Correct grammar: use past tense for past situations and avoid contractions/slang like “Nope.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. As a result, I often walked to school or borrowed my neighbors’ bikes when I needed to go further.

提案: Give a direct answer and support it with specific, broader details and linking words. Say why bikes are popular (e.g., cost, convenience, environment) and provide a brief personal example. Use plural agreement and correct article use (e.g., “their bikes” → “their bikes” is fine but structure the sentence better).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. For example, most of my friends own bikes, so I sometimes borrow one when I need to run errands in my neighborhood.

× Nope, I don't have since my mother didn't buy me a bike.

✓ Nope, I didn't have one because my mother didn't buy me a bike.

The student used present tense 'don't have' to refer to past possession; the question asks about childhood (past). Use past tense 'didn't have'. Also 'since' is used incorrectly as a causal connector in spoken English here; 'because' is clearer. Replace 'a bike' with 'one' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for past experiences and use 'because' for reasons in simple sentences.

× Yes, actually since all of my friends have their bike and I just borrow their bikes.

✓ Yes. Actually, since all of my friends have bikes, I just borrow theirs.

This sentence mixes present simple with incorrect singular/plural and pronoun use. 'Have their bike' should be 'have bikes' (plural) or 'have a bike'; 'borrow their bikes' can be shortened to 'borrow theirs'. Keep present simple for habitual actions ('have', 'borrow'). Also punctuation: split into two clauses and use commas. Suggestion: use consistent plural nouns and possessive pronouns ('theirs') for conciseness and clarity.