Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I did), then add one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Fix sentence structure, verb forms and word choice (e.g., "Of course" not "Of cogs"). Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my father gave me when I was eight, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood. Because it was lightweight and had a comfortable seat, I could ride for hours without getting tired.

提案: Answer directly, then give clear reasons with linking words and specific examples. Improve coherence by using accurate expressions (e.g., "can't afford" rather than "have to work out") and avoid vague phrases. Provide one or two concise supporting points: economic reasons, infrastructure, or cultural preferences.

例: Not very popular, in my opinion. Many young people can't afford to buy or maintain a good bicycle because of high living costs, and there is limited safe cycling infrastructure in cities, so most people prefer motorbikes or public transport.

× Of cogs and used to have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Of course, I used to have a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence has incorrect words and missing structure. 'Of cogs' is likely a mistaken attempt at 'Of course'. Also 'used to have' requires an explicit subject; the sentence lacked 'I' before 'used'. Correct structure: 'Of course, I used to have a bike when I was a child.' Suggestion: listen for common phrases like 'Of course' and include the subject for past habitual 'used to'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× The color of the bike is red and I love it a lot because this bike is the fact if I've ever got from my dad.

✓ The bike was red and I loved it a lot because it was the best thing I ever got from my dad.

Multiple errors: tense consistency and incorrect phrase 'the fact if I've ever got'. Use past tense 'was' and 'loved' to match 'when I was a child'. 'I ever got' should be 'I ever received' or more naturally 'I ever got' -> 'I ever got' works but needs 'the best thing I ever got'. Use 'best thing' rather than 'the fact'. Suggestion: maintain past tense for past events and use natural collocations like 'the best thing I ever got'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I don't think so because a lot of teenagers in our country are struggling with the skyrocketing living costs, so they have to work out and they cannot pursue healthy sport like biking.

✓ I don't think so because many teenagers in our country are struggling with skyrocketing living costs, so they have to work and cannot pursue healthy sports like biking.

Small errors: 'a lot of teenagers' is acceptable but 'many teenagers' is more natural here; 'work out' means exercise, but context implies 'work to earn money', so use 'work'. Also 'healthy sport' should be plural 'healthy sports' or 'activities'. Maintain present continuous 'are struggling' is correct. Suggestion: choose verbs that match intended meaning and use plural for general activities ('sports'). Grammar problem type ID:6