Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the grammar and be concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one short supporting detail if needed. Use past tense for childhood and avoid contradictions (saying both no and yes).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I grew up in a small town where most families couldn’t afford bicycles, so I usually walked to school instead.

提案: Improve grammar, clarity, and cohesion. Begin with a direct statement, then use linking words (because, for example, therefore) and provide specific reasons and an example. Use correct nouns and pronouns and keep sentences short (max 5).

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and fast way to commute. For example, many office workers and students use bikes for short trips across the city, especially when public transport is crowded.

× No, I don't have bike when I were a child, but yes of course I have a bicycle

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but yes, of course I have a bicycle now.

Errors: 'don't have' is present tense and incorrect for a past-time question; 'were' should be 'was' for first/third singular subject; missing article 'a' before 'bike'; missing comma before 'of course' and need to clarify time reference. Suggestion: Use past simple for past situations (didn't have, was), include the article 'a', and add 'now' to contrast past and present if intended.

× Yes biker bikes are very popular in my country because they are fast and inexpensive way to commute to work.

✓ Yes, bicycles (or motorbikes, if you mean 'biker bikes') are very popular in my country because they are a fast and inexpensive way to commute to work.

Errors: 'biker bikes' is unclear; 'bikes' alone or 'bicycles' is better. Missing article 'a' before 'fast and inexpensive way'. Commas needed after 'Yes'. Suggestion: Choose the correct noun (bicycles or motorbikes), include the indefinite article 'a' before 'fast', and add commas for clarity.

× They are especially convenient for a sort trip across the city and for who people used him to riding him.

✓ They are especially convenient for a short trip across the city and for people who used to ride them.

Errors: 'a sort trip' should be 'a short trip' (word order and spelling). 'for who people used him to riding him' is ungrammatical: relative pronoun order is wrong, 'used to' should express past habit, and pronouns must agree in number and case ('them' for plural 'bikes'). Suggestion: Use 'a short trip', 'people who used to ride them' to express that people formerly or regularly rode bikes; keep pronouns consistent and correct word forms.