Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct tense and word choice, and provide clearer structure: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and keep to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My dad bought me a small red bike when I was about seven, and I rode it almost every day for two years. After that I switched to a larger bike as I grew taller, and I learned to ride confidently on neighborhood roads.

提案: Correct vocabulary and pronunciation errors, use linking words for coherence, and give a specific reason and an example. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then add 1–2 supporting points with specific details and a linking word (e.g., because, therefore).

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because there are few dedicated bike lanes and traffic can be dangerous. For example, most commuters prefer motorcycles or cars, so cycling on busy roads feels unsafe and many people avoid it.

× Yes, I had a bike when it was a when I was younger.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was younger.

The phrase 'when it was a when I was younger' is ungrammatical and redundant. The correct past-tense time clause is 'when I was younger.' Remove the extra words to make a clear past-tense sentence.

× My dad bought me one and I think I rode it for a couple of years before I grow up and then I moved to use the bigger bike.

✓ My dad bought me one, and I think I rode it for a couple of years before I grew up and then moved on to a bigger bike.

The sequence refers to past events, so verbs must be in past tense. 'Grow up' should be 'grew up' for past tense. Also 'moved to use the bigger bike' is awkward; 'moved on to a bigger bike' is natural. Use commas to separate clauses.

× I don't think bite is really popular in my country because we don't have a specific lens for the bike.

✓ I don't think bikes are really popular in my country because we don't have specific lanes for bikes.

Several errors: 'bite' is a mispronunciation/wrong word for 'bikes' (plural). The verb 'are' is needed for plural subject 'bikes' (present tense). 'a specific lens' should be 'specific lanes' and 'for the bike' should be 'for bikes' to match plural. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct nouns.

× Most of the time people use the car or motorcycle and riding a bike on the car Rd. is quite dangerous so I think that's why people avoid using a bike.

✓ Most of the time people use cars or motorcycles, and riding a bike on the road is quite dangerous, so I think that's why people avoid using bikes.

Use plural nouns 'cars' and 'motorcycles' for general statements. 'Car Rd.' is incorrect — use 'the road.' Keep tense consistent (present simple) and use plural 'bikes' to match general reference. Also add commas to separate clauses for clarity.