Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and clear but can be improved. Make the topic sentence more direct, avoid minor grammar errors, and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Keep the response within 3–4 sentences. For example, correct phrasing such as “feel the need to” should be completed (e.g., “feel the need to learn”).

例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child because my school provided private transport, so I always took the school bus. As a result, I never had the opportunity to learn to ride. However, I remember being curious about cycling when I saw classmates riding during the holidays.

提案: The answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and vague statements. Use a clear topic sentence, fix subject-verb agreement, and include a specific example or reason linked with connectors (e.g., because, for example, therefore). Limit to 3–4 sentences and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “commonly used,” “practical transport”).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, shopkeepers and students often cycle to work or school since bikes are affordable and practical. Therefore, you see bicycles parked outside markets and schools every day.

× As a result, I never had the chance to learn cycling or feel the need to one.

✓ As a result, I never had the chance to learn to cycle or felt the need to.

The sentence misuses the verb phrase 'learn cycling' and the pronoun 'one'. In English we say 'learn to cycle' or 'learn cycling' is less common; here 'learn to cycle' fits best. Also 'feel the need to one' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'felt the need to (do so)'. Because the main clause is in past tense ('I never had'), the parallel clause should also use past tense 'felt'. Suggestion: use 'learn to cycle' and 'felt the need to'.

× Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because every person have bikes to go to different places easily.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because every person has a bike to go to different places easily.

The subject 'every person' is singular, so the verb must be singular: 'has' not 'have'. Also 'bikes' after 'every person' is awkward; use singular 'a bike' to match 'every'. Suggestion: change verb to 'has' and noun to 'a bike'.

× They can save their time and can go wherever they want to go.

✓ They can save time and go wherever they want to.

'Save their time' is unnatural; 'save time' is idiomatic. Repeating 'can' is unnecessary and redundant. Also 'wherever they want to go' can be shortened to 'wherever they want to'. Suggestion: use 'save time' and omit the second 'can' and the final 'go' for conciseness and naturalness.