Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your response did not answer the question. In Part 1 you should give a direct, short answer (yes/no) and one or two brief supporting details. Keep it natural and relevant, avoid laughter alone as a reply. For example, state whether you had a bike, who bought it or how often you used it.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small bicycle when I was seven, and I used to ride it to the park almost every day with my friends.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has problems with grammar, repetition, and clarity. Aim for a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting reasons with linking words, and specific details. Avoid repeating words and use correct collocations (e.g. 'mostly people belong to the middle class' or 'many people are middle class').

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Mainly, many families are middle class and find bicycles more affordable than cars, so people often use bikes for short trips and commuting to work or school.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because in my country mostly the people are belonging to belongs to a middle middle class family which has too too much bad, which has much bad financial conditions which leads them them to buy a bike rather than a car.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country because most people belong to middle-class families with poor financial conditions, which leads them to buy a bike rather than a car.

Errors identified: repeated words ('middle middle', 'too too much', 'them them') and incorrect verb form 'are belonging to belongs to' caused pronoun/verb misuse and redundancy. Also 'bikes' can be more formally 'bicycles' and 'mostly the people are belonging to' should be 'most people belong to'. Use 'middle-class families' (hyphenated as a compound adjective) and 'poor financial conditions' instead of 'much bad financial conditions'. Suggestions: remove repeated words, use the simple present for general facts ('people belong'), use 'most' instead of 'mostly the people', and keep pronouns singular/plural consistent ('them' correctly refers to 'people' here).