Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and conciseness. Use correct tense and subject-verb agreement (e.g., “I still am not able” or “I still can’t ride a bike”). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then briefly add one supporting detail or reason. Avoid redundancy (don’t repeat ‘when I was a child’ twice).

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child, but I never learned to ride it, so I still can’t ride a bike today. Because my parents were busy, I didn’t get much practice, and I only used it as decoration rather than for riding.

提案: Make the answer more concise and improve sentence structure and vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, 'for example' or 'because'). Use plural forms and articles correctly (e.g., 'public bikes' or 'a public bike scheme').

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, I often see many cyclists on the streets, and there is a public bike-sharing scheme that lets you rent and return bikes at docking stations across the city, which makes cycling very convenient.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I never really learned how to ride a bike, so until today I still weren't able to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I never really learned how to ride a bike, so even today I still am not able to ride one.

The sentence mixes past and present incorrectly and uses the wrong auxiliary for negation with 'I'. 'Were n't' is incorrect for 'I' (subject-verb agreement) and the time reference 'until today' with past tense 'weren't able' is awkward. Use 'even today' or 'still' plus present simple 'am not able' to indicate a continuing inability. Also replace the repeated 'a bike' with 'one' for naturalness.

× I think bikes are definitely popular in my country for example I can always see bikes on the street and we have public bike that you can just rent and basically you are able to return almost in every corner of my city.

✓ I think bikes are definitely popular in my country. For example, I can often see bicycles on the street, and we have public bikes that you can rent and return on almost every corner of my city.

Issues: missing punctuation leading to run-on sentence and some quantifier and count noun errors. 'Can always see bikes' is better as 'can often see bicycles' (frequency adverb placement and natural collocation). 'Public bike' should be plural 'public bikes' or 'a public bike system'; 'you can just rent' -> 'you can rent' (unnecessary 'just'). 'Return almost in every corner' should be 'return on almost every corner' or better 'on almost every street corner'. Also add commas to separate clauses.

× So it's very convenient.

✓ So it is very convenient.

Contraction 'it's' is acceptable in speech but in formal correction expand to 'it is' if desired; grammatically the original is fine. Provided correction keeps same meaning and uses full form. No tense error; this entry is included to follow instruction to correct sentences individually.