Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and an unnecessary word. Give a clear topic sentence then one or two supporting details using correct past-tense verbs. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and natural. For example, say what kind of bike it was, how often you rode it, or a short memory to make it specific.

例: Yes, I had a small red bicycle when I was a child. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood, and I remember practicing balancing until I could ride without training wheels.

提案: The answer is relevant and contains good points, but needs grammatical correction and tighter phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words (for example, because/so). Avoid redundancy (e.g., "to get around" and "visiting cities").

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines because they are convenient and affordable. For short trips around towns or commutes in crowded areas, many people choose bicycles since they are cheap to buy and easy to maintain.

× I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it, wrote it.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it and would ride it often.

The original contains an incorrect verb 'wrote' which does not fit context; likely a slip for another past action. This is a past tense issue because 'wrote' is an unrelated past tense verb and the sentence needs a past habitual expression. Use 'used to ride' or 'would ride' to express repeated past actions. Suggestion: keep consistent past habitual forms (used to/would) and remove unrelated verbs.

× Bicycles are one of the most convenient and affordable way of transportation to get around here in the Philippines, especially if we're just going to a short trips visiting cities or municipalities anywhere.

✓ Bicycles are one of the most convenient and affordable ways of transportation to get around here in the Philippines, especially if we are just going on short trips to visit cities or municipalities.

Multiple article and noun-form errors: 'way' should be plural 'ways' to agree with 'one of the ... ways'; 'a short trips' mixes singular article with plural noun—use 'short trips' without 'a' or 'a short trip' singular. Also 'going to a short trips visiting' is ungrammatical; use 'going on short trips to visit'. Replace contraction 'we're' with 'we are' for formality consistency (contraction not grammatically wrong but rewritten for clarity). Suggestions: match singular/plural forms, use correct preposition 'on' with 'going on trips', and use infinitive 'to visit' for purpose.

× They're cheap to buy and maintain.

✓ They are cheap to buy and maintain.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but contraction expanded for clarity. No singular/plural error here; 'They' correctly refers to 'bicycles' (plural). Keep plural agreement between subject and verb. No further change required.