Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, mạch lạc và sửa ngữ pháp. Tránh lặp từ và tiếng nói ngập (umm). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ về tuổi bắt đầu, ai dạy bạn, kỷ niệm ngắn). Dùng liên từ hợp lý và câu ngắn để rõ ràng. Ví dụ nên sửa lỗi thì (was/were), số ít/nhì (child/children), và cấu trúc sở hữu (every parent thinks).

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about six, and my father taught me how to ride it in our neighborhood park. It was a small red bike with training wheels, and learning to ride gave me more confidence and freedom.

提案: Cần rõ ràng hơn và sửa từ vựng sai (‘pie’ → ‘bike’) cùng cấu trúc câu. Trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích bằng 1–2 lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: tiện lợi, giá rẻ, nhưng không phổ biến ở đô thị lớn do giao thông). Dùng liên từ (however, because) để nối ý và tránh lặp từ và tiếng ngập. Hạn chế câu dài mơ hồ.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in rural areas and among students because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. However, in large cities most people prefer cars or motorbikes due to longer distances and heavy traffic.

× Yes, of course, because I think every child has their own bike when they there was a child.

✓ Yes, of course, because I think every child had their own bike when they were a child.

Original sentence has multiple subject-verb and tense issues: 'every child has' should match past context 'when they were a child' so use past 'had'; 'there was a child' is ungrammatical and should be 'they were a child'. Also 'every child' is singular while 'they' is used as singular gender-neutral pronoun — that is acceptable, but verb must agree with plural form of 'they' (were). Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) and use 'had' and 'were'.

× Because I think that's every parent think that umm, how to ride a bike is the first skill that every children need to learn.

✓ Because I think every parent thinks that learning to ride a bike is the first skill that every child needs to learn.

Problems: word order and verb forms. 'That's every parent think' is incorrect; use 'every parent thinks' (third person singular). 'How to ride a bike' should be expressed as a gerund phrase 'learning to ride a bike'. 'Every children' is wrong: 'every' requires singular noun 'child'. 'Need' must agree with singular 'child' so 'needs'. Suggestion: use 'every parent thinks' and 'every child needs' and replace 'how to ride a bike' with 'learning to ride a bike' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I think in my country, umm, pie is a famous transport there's lots of people use, but uh, I think that's why it's not the main transport that people use everyday to uh, use on a streak.

✓ Yes, I think in my country, bikes are a common mode of transport that a lot of people use, but I don't think they are the main mode of transport people use every day for commuting.

Original has many errors: 'pie' is likely 'bikes' (word choice), 'a famous transport' is incorrect collocation — use 'a common mode of transport' or 'a popular form of transport'. 'There's lots of people use' mixes structures; correct: 'that a lot of people use'. 'Everyday' (adjective) vs 'every day' (adverbial) — use 'every day'. 'Use on a streak' is unidiomatic; likely 'for commuting' or 'for short trips'. Suggestion: say 'bikes are a common mode of transport that a lot of people use, but they are not the main mode used for daily commuting'.